Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but there is a repetition of the word 'after' which affects the natural flow. Try to avoid redundancy and keep your sentences concise. Also, you could add a linking phrase to make your answer more coherent.

例: I usually eat snacks in the evening after dinner while I watch TV.

提案: Your answer is well-structured and informative with good vocabulary. To improve, you could use linking words to connect your ideas more smoothly and add a brief example or consequence to enrich your response.

例: I do not think it is healthy because snacks are usually fried and high in fat and salt, which can lead to cardiovascular diseases. For example, eating too many salty snacks can increase blood pressure.

提案: Your answer is brief and contains a grammatical error ('eat' should be 'ate'). To improve, respond directly with a topic sentence, correct grammar, and add supporting details using linking words for clarity.

例: Yes, I ate snacks almost every day when I was young, but I knew they were not healthy because they contained a lot of sugar and fat.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be more natural by avoiding filler words like 'Umm' and by using correct plural forms ('flavours'). Adding more specific details and linking words would improve coherence.

例: I like to eat chips, and when I go to London, I try different flavours every day because there are many unique options available.

× I usually eat snacks in the evening after after dinner when I watch TV.

✓ I usually eat snacks in the evening after dinner when I watch TV.

The phrase 'after after dinner' contains a repeated preposition 'after'. This is a typographical error. The correct form is to use 'after' only once before 'dinner'. Removing the duplicate improves clarity and correctness.

× Yes, I eat it almost everyday but I do think it is not healthy.

✓ Yes, I ate it almost every day but I do think it is not healthy.

The question asks about past habits ('Did you often eat snacks when you were young?'), so the verb should be in the past tense. 'Eat' is present tense; it should be changed to 'ate' to correctly reflect past action. Also, 'everyday' (adjective) should be 'every day' (adverbial phrase) to indicate frequency.

× Yes, I eat it almost everyday but I do think it is not healthy.

✓ Yes, I ate them almost every day but I do think they are not healthy.

The pronoun 'it' is singular, but 'snacks' is plural. Therefore, the pronouns referring to 'snacks' should be plural: 'them' and 'they'. This ensures agreement in number between pronouns and their antecedents.