Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 자연스럽고 효과적이지만, 연결어 사용이 부족하여 문장 간 논리적 흐름이 다소 약합니다. 또한, 구체적인 예시를 조금 더 추가하면 좋겠습니다.

例: I usually eat snacks in the afternoon, especially when I feel tired or hungry before dinner. For instance, I might have a handful of nuts or a piece of fruit. Moreover, I sometimes snack while studying or watching TV to help me stay focused or relaxed.

提案: 답변이 명확하고 적절한 내용을 포함하고 있으나, 연결어를 사용하여 문장 간의 관계를 더 명확히 하면 더욱 좋겠습니다.

例: I would say it depends on the type of snack. For example, if it's something natural like fruit or nuts, then it can be healthy and give me energy. However, if it's sugar or processed food, eating too much of it can definitely be harmful.

提案: 답변에 문법적 오류와 부자연스러운 표현이 있습니다. 문장을 명확하고 자연스럽게 수정하고, 연결어를 사용하여 내용을 풍부하게 하세요.

例: Yes, I ate snacks quite often when I was young. For example, I usually had chips or candies after school because they were quick and tasty. However, I didn't pay much attention to nutrition at that age, so I probably ate too many unhealthy snacks.

提案: 답변이 자연스럽고 구체적이지만, 'a sweet and healthy snacks' 부분에서 단수와 복수의 일치 오류가 있습니다. 문법에 주의하고 연결어를 활용해 보세요.

例: To be honest, I enjoy both sweet and healthy snacks. For example, I often eat fruit or yogurt when I want something light. However, sometimes I also treat myself to chocolate or cookies when I crave something sweet.

× Looking bad.

✓ It looked bad.

The original sentence 'Looking bad.' is a sentence fragment lacking a subject and a finite verb, which makes it incomplete. To correct it, a subject and verb are needed, such as 'It looked bad.' This forms a complete sentence that properly conveys the intended meaning.

× I think I ate too much on healthiness, but at the age I didn't really care about nutrition.

✓ I think I ate too much unhealthily, but at that age I didn't really care about nutrition.

The phrase 'ate too much on healthiness' is incorrect because 'on healthiness' is not a proper prepositional phrase here, and 'healthiness' is a noun that does not fit the intended meaning. The adverb 'unhealthily' correctly modifies the verb 'ate' to express the manner of eating. Also, 'at the age' should be 'at that age' to refer to a specific time in the past.

× To be honest, I enjoy both a sweet and healthy snacks.

✓ To be honest, I enjoy both sweet and healthy snacks.

The phrase 'both a sweet and healthy snacks' is incorrect because 'both' should be followed by plural nouns without an article. The article 'a' is singular and conflicts with the plural noun 'snacks'. Removing 'a' and using 'both sweet and healthy snacks' correctly expresses enjoyment of two types of snacks.