Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác, ví dụ như 'big foot caps' không rõ nghĩa. Bạn nên sử dụng từ vựng chính xác và câu trả lời ngắn gọn, tự nhiên hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng các từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: I usually eat snacks when I feel stressed or tired. For instance, after a long day at work, I like to have some chocolate or fruit to help me relax and improve my mood.

提案: Bạn đã trả lời đúng trọng tâm câu hỏi và có ý kiến rõ ràng. Tuy nhiên, câu trả lời có một số lỗi nhỏ về ngữ pháp và từ vựng như 'additive' nên là 'additives'. Bạn nên tránh sử dụng từ ngữ không chính xác và thêm các từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: I don't think eating snacks is very healthy because most of them are processed and contain high amounts of sugar, salt, and unhealthy additives. Therefore, consuming too many snacks can negatively affect our health.

提案: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác như 'littlest dress', 'hard craft sweet and salty flavor', và cấu trúc câu chưa rõ ràng. Bạn nên luyện tập cách diễn đạt đơn giản, chính xác và tránh lỗi lặp từ. Hãy sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và có liên kết logic.

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was a child. Whenever I went to the market with my mom, I would ask her to buy me candies and chips because I loved sweet and salty flavors. Eating snacks was one of my favorite pastimes during my childhood.

提案: Bạn đã trả lời rõ ràng và có sử dụng từ vựng mô tả tốt như 'crunchy structure' và 'rich savory flavor'. Tuy nhiên, có lỗi lặp từ 'made made' và câu trả lời có thể thêm từ nối để mạch lạc hơn. Hãy chú ý phát âm và ngữ pháp để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

例: I really enjoy potato snacks made by Lace because they have a wonderful crunchy texture and a rich, savory flavor. In fact, I find them so addictive that it's hard to stop eating once I start.

× having a big foot caps to boost my mood

✓ having a big food cup to boost my mood

The phrase 'big foot caps' is incorrect and likely a mishearing or typo. The intended phrase is 'big food cup', which makes sense in context as a snack portion. The error is related to incorrect word choice rather than quantifier, but since 'big' is a quantifier here, it is categorized under quantifier misuse.

× if I had a tough day at school or work

✓ if I have a tough day at school or work

The sentence is about a habitual action in the present, so the present tense 'have' should be used instead of past tense 'had'. Using past tense here is incorrect because the condition refers to a general or repeated situation.

× Most snacks these days are processed and manufactured by companies, so they often contain a lot of sugar, salt, and unhealthy additive.

✓ Most snacks these days are processed and manufactured by companies, so they often contain a lot of sugar, salt, and unhealthy additives.

The word 'additive' should be plural 'additives' because it refers to multiple substances added to snacks. Using singular here is incorrect when referring to multiple items.

× I would ask ask her to buy me some littlest dress like candies and chips because I really hard craft sweet and salty flavor.

✓ I would ask her to buy me some small candy-like candies and chips because I really like sweet and salty flavors.

The phrase 'littlest dress like candies' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'small candy-like candies' or simply 'small candies'. Also, 'hard craft sweet and salty flavor' is incorrect and should be 'like sweet and salty flavors'. The error involves incorrect quantifiers and word choice.

× Eating snack was one of my favorite pastime in during my childhood.

✓ Eating snacks was one of my favorite pastimes during my childhood.

The sentence has multiple errors: 'Eating snack' should be plural 'Eating snacks'; 'pastime' should be plural 'pastimes'; 'in during' is incorrect, only 'during' is needed. The sentence structure is incorrect and needs correction for clarity and grammar.

× I really enjoy the potato snack made made by Lace because they have a wonderful crunchy structure and a rich savory flavor.

✓ I really enjoy the potato snack made by Lace because it has a wonderful crunchy texture and a rich savory flavor.

The phrase 'made made' is a repetition error and should be 'made'. Also, 'they have' is incorrect because 'potato snack' is singular, so 'it has' is correct. 'Structure' is better replaced by 'texture' when describing food. The error involves quantifier and subject-verb agreement.