Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Сіздің жауабыңызда көп үзілістер мен қайталанулар бар, бұл сөйлеуіңізді табиғи емес етеді. Жауапты қысқа әрі нақты етіп, негізгі ақпаратты айтыңыз. Мысалы, "I usually eat snacks like ice cream, apples, and Snickers because I enjoy sweet treats."

例: I usually eat snacks like ice cream, apples, and Snickers because I enjoy sweet treats.

提案: Жауабыңызда грамматикалық қателер бар және сөздерді дұрыс қолдану маңызды. "Snake" орнына "snack" деп айту керек. Сонымен қатар, жауапты толық әрі нақты етіп беріңіз. Мысалы, "My favorite snack is Snickers, but I don't think it is healthy because it contains a lot of sugar."

例: My favorite snack is Snickers, but I don't think it is healthy because it contains a lot of sugar.

提案: Жауабыңызда мағынасы түсініксіз сөздер бар және грамматикалық қателер көп. "Sugar sex" деген сөз тіркесі дұрыс емес. Жауапты қарапайым әрі нақты етіп айтыңыз. Мысалы, "Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because I liked sweet foods."

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because I liked sweet foods.

提案: Жауабыңызда сөздерді дұрыс айтпау және қайталанулар бар. "Sneakers" орнына "Snickers" деп айту керек. Жауапты нақты әрі түсінікті етіп беріңіз. Мысалы, "I like Snickers and various kinds of chocolate such as white, milk, and dark chocolate. I also enjoy fruits like apples and bananas."

例: I like Snickers and various kinds of chocolate such as white, milk, and dark chocolate. I also enjoy fruits like apples and bananas.

× I, uh, usually eat snacks, uh, it's ice cream and, uh, apple, many fruit and Snickers. I like, uh, this snack.

✓ I usually eat snacks like ice cream, apples, many fruits, and Snickers. I like these snacks.

The original sentence has singular and plural mismatches such as 'apple' instead of 'apples' and 'many fruit' instead of 'many fruits'. Also, 'this snack' should be plural 'these snacks' to match the list. Correcting these improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× My favorite snacks it's Snickers and I don't think the snake healthy because it's snake contains many sugar.

✓ My favorite snack is Snickers and I don't think the snack is healthy because it contains a lot of sugar.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'it's' instead of 'is' and 'snake' instead of 'snack'. Also, 'many sugar' is incorrect; 'a lot of sugar' or 'much sugar' is appropriate. Pronouns and articles must agree with the nouns they refer to.

× Yes, I often eat snacks very young because I like. Sugar sex.

✓ Yes, I often ate snacks when I was very young because I liked sugar.

The question is about past habits, so the past tense 'ate' and 'liked' should be used instead of present tense 'eat' and 'like'. Also, 'very young' needs 'when I was' for clarity. 'Sugar sex' seems to be a mispronunciation and corrected to 'sugar'.

× I like it. Sneakers, white chocolate, brown chocolate, dark chocolate, so many chocolate and I like it. Apple, banana, some more fruit.

✓ I like Snickers, white chocolate, milk chocolate, dark chocolate, many kinds of chocolate, and I also like apples, bananas, and some other fruits.

'Sneakers' should be 'Snickers' (brand name). 'Chocolate' needs quantification like 'many kinds of chocolate' to be grammatically correct. 'Apple' and 'banana' should be plural 'apples' and 'bananas' when talking generally. 'Some more fruit' is better as 'some other fruits' for clarity and correctness.