Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时语法错误较多，句子结构不清晰，建议简化句子并注意时态一致性，同时避免冗余。

例: I usually eat snacks about twice a week, especially when I watch TV or enjoy leisure activities. I also like sharing snacks with my friends because it makes me feel happy.

提案: 回答不完整且表达混乱，建议使用完整句子，明确表达观点，并提供具体原因。

例: I think eating snacks is unhealthy because it can increase the risk of heart disease and cause other health problems.

提案: 回答中有多处语法错误和词汇错误，建议注意时态和单词拼写，表达要简洁明了。

例: I often ate snacks when I was young because I thought they were more delicious than regular meals.

提案: 句子结构重复且有语法错误，建议简化表达，使用连词使句子更流畅。

例: I like chocolate because it makes me happy. I also enjoy sharing it with my friends, which helps strengthen our friendship.

× Maybe twice a week I like eating snacks when I was watching TV or having something fun and I like to share my snacks with my friends 'cause it make me feel delighted.

✓ Maybe twice a week I like eating snacks when I am watching TV or having fun and I like to share my snacks with my friends because it makes me feel delighted.

句中“when I was watching TV”时态不一致，描述现在习惯应使用现在进行时“when I am watching TV”。“having something fun”表达不自然，应为“having fun”。“'cause it make me”主语是第三人称单数，谓语动词应加-s，改为“it makes me”。

× It is bad for our health because firstly, it will increase the risk of a heart disease and it's also bad for our. Health bad for us?

✓ It is bad for our health because, firstly, it will increase the risk of heart disease and it's also bad for us.

“a heart disease”中“heart disease”是不可数名词，不需要冠词“a”。句子中“our. Health bad for us?”结构不完整，应合并为“it's also bad for us”。

× I always eat snakes when I was young because I think when I was young I think it snakes were were delicious then eat a normal menus.

✓ I always ate snacks when I was young because I thought snacks were more delicious than normal meals.

描述过去习惯应使用过去时，“eat”应改为“ate”。“I think”应改为过去时“I thought”。“snakes”应为“snacks”。“were were”重复，应删去一个“were”。“then eat a normal menus”表达不正确，应改为“than normal meals”。

× I like it chocolate because it chocolate can make me feel delighted and I like to share my chocolate with my friends and it can increase our friendship.

✓ I like chocolate because chocolate can make me feel delighted and I like to share my chocolate with my friends and it can increase our friendship.

“it chocolate”中“it”多余，应直接用“chocolate”。

× Maybe twice a week I like eating snacks when I was watching TV or having something fun and I like to share my snacks with my friends 'cause it make me feel delighted.

✓ Maybe twice a week I like eating snacks when I am watching TV or having fun and I like to share my snacks with my friends because it makes me feel delighted.

主语“it”是第三人称单数，谓语动词应加-s，改为“makes”。