Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了吃零食的时间和原因，但语言不够自然，句子结构有些混乱，且存在语法错误。建议简化句子结构，使用更自然的表达方式，并注意时态和主谓一致。

例: I usually eat snacks when I'm watching movies or doing my homework because they help me relax and feel happy.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误，表达不够清晰，且句子重复。建议使用更准确的语法结构，明确表达观点，并避免重复。

例: I know snacks are unhealthy, but they make me feel better when I'm sad. That's why I like eating them sometimes.

提案: 回答中时态混用，表达不够连贯，且有语法错误。建议理清时间线，使用正确的时态，并使句子更流畅。

例: When I was a child, I ate a lot of candies. My mom often told me they were unhealthy, but I still liked eating snacks, and I continue to enjoy them now.

提案: 回答表达了喜欢的零食，但句子结构重复且不够简洁。建议合并句子，使用更自然的表达方式。

例: I like many snacks, but my favorites are chocolate chips and chocolate ice cream.

× I usually eat snacks when I'm watching movie or watching TV and also when I'm doing homework because snacks can relax, feel me relax and feel me happy.

✓ I usually eat snacks when I'm watching a movie or watching TV and also when I'm doing homework because snacks can relax me, make me feel relaxed and happy.

这里需要使用动词的-ing形式来表示正在进行的动作，同时需要加冠词'a'在'movie'前。'feel me relax'和'feel me happy'的表达不正确，应该用'make me feel relaxed and happy'。

× Of course snacks is unhealthy, but snacks can make me happy and helpful about my feelings when I'm unhappy.

✓ Of course snacks are unhealthy, but snacks can make me happy and help with my feelings when I'm unhappy.

'snacks'是复数，谓语动词应使用复数形式'are'。另外，'helpful about my feelings'表达不准确，应改为'help with my feelings'。

× But if I want to say like when I was children, of course I eat a lot of candies and my mom always say that it's unhealthy and don't eat.

✓ But if I want to say like when I was a child, of course I ate a lot of candies and my mom always said that it's unhealthy and told me not to eat them.

'children'是复数，句中应使用单数形式'a child'。描述过去的动作，动词应使用过去时态，如'ate'和'said'。'don't eat'应改为'told me not to eat them'以表达过去的建议。

× I have many favorite snacks. For me the one of them is chocolate chips and ice cream.

✓ I have many favorite snacks. For me, one of them is chocolate chips and ice cream.

'the one of them'表达不正确，应为'one of them'。

× I really like to eat chocolate ice cream that is my favorite.

✓ I really like to eat chocolate ice cream; it is my favorite.

句子中缺少连接词或标点，导致表达不清晰。使用分号或连接词使句子更通顺。