Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时语法和表达不够准确，句子结构较为混乱，建议使用更自然流畅的表达方式，并注意时态和冠词的使用。

例: I usually eat snacks after classes or when I'm busy with work because they help me regain energy and stay active.

提案: 回答内容较好，但句子连接不够自然，部分语法错误，如时态和主谓一致。建议使用连接词使表达更连贯，并注意语法准确。

例: I think it depends on the type of snack. For example, healthy snacks like nuts and fruits provide good nutrition, but snacks like chips or cake contain too much sugar, which is harmful to our health.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和重复，表达不够清晰。建议简化句子结构，注意单复数和时态的正确使用。

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young. For example, chips were my favorite, and I usually ate them after school and shared them with my friends.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够流畅。建议使用更准确的表达方式，注意动词形式和句子结构。

例: I like to eat chocolates, especially 100% dark chocolate, because I am trying to lose weight and this snack is suitable for controlling my appetite.

× After having class or busy work 'cause eating snack after them can really help me to get energy and being active.

✓ After having class or busy work because eating snacks after them can really help me to get energy and be active.

动词后面接动名词或不定式时要注意形式一致。这里 'being active' 应改为 'be active'，因为动词 'help' 后面接不定式。

× After having class or busy work 'cause eating snack after them can really help me to get energy and being active.

✓ After having class or busy work because eating snacks after them can really help me to get energy and be active.

名词单复数要一致。'snack' 应改为复数 'snacks'，因为指的是零食的泛指。

× But on the other hand, something like chips or cake, I think it contained too much sugar which is bad for our health.

✓ But on the other hand, something like chips or cake, I think it contains too much sugar which is bad for our health.

时态错误，'contained' 是过去式，应使用现在时 'contains'，因为描述的是普遍事实。

× And for example chip was chips was my favorites when I was a pupils and I usually eat after school and also bring it to school and sharing with my friends.

✓ And for example, chips were my favorites when I was a pupil and I usually ate them after school and also brought them to school and shared with my friends.

名词复数和动词时态错误。'chip' 应为复数 'chips'，'favorites' 应为单数 'favorite'，'pupils' 应为单数 'pupil'，动词时态应与过去时间一致。

× And for example chip was chips was my favorites when I was a pupils and I usually eat after school and also bring it to school and sharing with my friends.

✓ And for example, chips were my favorites when I was a pupil and I usually ate them after school and also brought them to school and shared with my friends.

描述过去的动作，动词应使用过去时态，如 'ate', 'brought', 'shared'。

× And for example chip was chips was my favorites when I was a pupils and I usually eat after school and also bring it to school and sharing with my friends.

✓ And for example, chips were my favorites when I was a pupil and I usually ate them after school and also brought them to school and shared with my friends.

代词使用错误，'it' 应改为 'them'，因为指代复数名词 'chips'。

× And for example chip was chips was my favorites when I was a pupils and I usually eat after school and also bring it to school and sharing with my friends.

✓ And for example, chips were my favorites when I was a pupil and I usually ate them after school and also brought them to school and shared with my friends.

动词形式错误，'sharing' 应改为过去式 'shared'，保持时态一致。

× I would say chocolates and 100% Stark chocolates currently 'cause now I'm in I'm trying to losing my weight and this snack is like most suitable for controlling my weight.

✓ I would say chocolates and 100% Stark chocolates currently because now I'm trying to lose weight and this snack is the most suitable for controlling my weight.

动词后接动词时，'trying to losing' 应改为 'trying to lose'，不定式后接动词原形。

× I would say chocolates and 100% Stark chocolates currently 'cause now I'm in I'm trying to losing my weight and this snack is like most suitable for controlling my weight.

✓ I would say chocolates and 100% Stark chocolates currently because now I'm trying to lose weight and this snack is the most suitable for controlling my weight.

口语缩写 'cause' 应改为正式连词 'because'，使句子更正式和规范。

× I would say chocolates and 100% Stark chocolates currently 'cause now I'm in I'm trying to losing my weight and this snack is like most suitable for controlling my weight.

✓ I would say chocolates and 100% Stark chocolates currently because now I'm trying to lose weight and this snack is the most suitable for controlling my weight.

'like most suitable' 中 'like' 用法错误，应去掉，改为 'the most suitable'，表示最高级。