Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时应避免重复表达，语言更自然流畅。可以简洁明了地说明吃零食的时间，并用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: I usually eat snacks when I'm stressed or relaxing, such as watching movies. Besides, I often have something to nibble on throughout the day.

提案: 回答中有重复表达“high sugar”，应避免冗余。建议用更丰富的词汇描述零食的健康问题，并用连接词衔接观点。

例: I don't think eating snacks is healthy because they usually contain high levels of sugar, salt, and fat. However, they do provide me with emotional comfort.

提案: 句子结构不够清晰，语法错误较多。建议分句表达，使用连接词使句子更流畅，避免语法错误。

例: I didn't eat snacks often when I was young because my parents were strict about snack time. They only bought me snacks once or twice a month.

提案: 回答中有重复词汇，语法错误（如“after I eating”）。建议简洁表达喜好，并用连接词衔接感受。

例: I definitely enjoy sweet snacks like chocolate candies, jellies, and cakes. Although I feel a bit guilty after eating them, I just can't resist.

× Well, most of the time if I'm awake, there may be something in my mouth.

✓ Well, most of the time if I'm awake, there is usually something in my mouth.

这里使用'may be'表示可能性，但根据语境，表达的是习惯性动作，应该用一般现在时的陈述句，使用'there is usually'更合适。

× snacks are always high sugar, have high sugar, high salt and high fat

✓ snacks are always high in sugar, salt, and fat

形容词high后面需要介词in来表示含量，且列举多个成分时应统一表达，避免重复。

× but it gave me a lot of emotional support.

✓ but it gives me a lot of emotional support.

前文谈论的是现在的情况，情感支持是持续的，应使用一般现在时。

× Not really, because my parents were strict with my snack time they always bought me some snacks once or twice a month so I didn't really eat at snacks.

✓ Not really, because my parents were strict with my snack time. They always bought me some snacks once or twice a month, so I didn't really eat snacks.

原句缺少必要的标点符号，导致句子结构混乱，应分句并去掉多余的介词'at'。

× I didn't really eat at snacks.

✓ I didn't really eat snacks.

动词eat后直接接名词snacks，不需要介词'at'，使用'at'是不正确的。

× Well I well I feel a bit guilty after I eating but I just can't help it.

✓ Well, I feel a bit guilty after I eat, but I just can't help it.

动词after后应接动词原形或名词，'after I eating'结构错误，应改为'after I eat'。