Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer needs to be clearer and more structured. Start with a direct response to the question, then add specific details using linking words. Avoid unclear phrases like "I usually it's an X." Also, try to use more natural expressions and correct grammar.

例: I usually eat snacks in the evening after work. For example, last weekend, I went to a street market with my friends where I enjoyed some delicious momos because I was craving something tasty.

提案: Your answer is relevant but can be improved by using more precise vocabulary and clearer sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and avoid repetition. Also, be careful with word choice, for example, 'fulfilled with proteins' should be 'rich in proteins'.

例: Yes, I believe eating snacks can be healthy because many snacks, like fruits, are rich in proteins and vitamins. Therefore, having such snacks helps me maintain good nutrition throughout the day.

提案: Your answer should be in the past tense since you are talking about the past. Also, try to make your sentences clearer and more coherent by using linking words. Avoid vague phrases like 'its snacks'.

例: Yes, I was very fond of snacks when I was younger. As far as I remember, I always asked my parents for snacks, and I used to save money to buy snacks to enjoy with my friends.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give specific examples using linking words. Also, check the names of snacks and use correct vocabulary, for example, 'veg moments' might be 'veg momos'.

例: It depends on my mood. Sometimes, I like to eat crispy and delicious snacks like vegetable momos or French fries because they taste very good and satisfy my cravings.

× I usually it's an X.

✓ Usually, I eat snacks at X.

The original sentence has a sentence structure error and unclear meaning. 'I usually it's an X' is incorrect. The corrected sentence clarifies the meaning and corrects the structure by placing the adverb 'usually' at the beginning and forming a proper sentence.

× On my weekends I hang out on street market with my friends where I enjoy the food where I want cravings.

✓ On my weekends, I hang out at the street market with my friends where I enjoy the food that satisfies my cravings.

The preposition 'on' is incorrect with 'street market'; it should be 'at'. Also, 'where I want cravings' is incorrect; it should be 'that satisfies my cravings' to express the intended meaning clearly.

× The last Saturday I enjoyed momos with my friends.

✓ Last Saturday, I enjoyed momos with my friends.

The phrase 'The last Saturday' is incorrect; it should be 'Last Saturday' without 'the'. The rest of the sentence is correct in past tense.

× there are lots of snacks that have lot of essential nutrients such as fruits that are fulfilled with proteins and different vitamins.

✓ There are lots of snacks that have lots of essential nutrients such as fruits that are full of proteins and different vitamins.

The phrase 'lot of' should be 'lots of' to match the plural noun 'nutrients'. Also, 'fulfilled with proteins' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'full of proteins'.

× Yes, I am very fond of its snacks when I was younger, as far as I remember, I always ask my parents for snacks and I'll save a lot of money to enjoy snacks with my friends.

✓ Yes, I was very fond of snacks when I was younger. As far as I remember, I always asked my parents for snacks and saved a lot of money to enjoy snacks with my friends.

'Its snacks' is incorrect; 'snacks' is plural and does not need a possessive pronoun here. Also, tense inconsistency: 'I am' should be 'I was' to match 'when I was younger'. 'I always ask' should be 'I always asked' to maintain past tense. 'I'll save' should be 'saved' to keep past tense consistent.

× Where is depend on my mood.

✓ It depends on my mood.

'Where is depend' is incorrect. The correct subject pronoun is 'It' and the verb should be 'depends' to agree with the singular subject.

× Sometime I really want to eat some crispy and delicious and some fries snacks such as veg moments that are really like because they are very delicious and yummy.

✓ Sometimes, I really want to eat some crispy and delicious fried snacks such as veg momos that I really like because they are very delicious and yummy.

'Sometime' should be 'Sometimes' to indicate frequency. 'Fries snacks' is incorrect; it should be 'fried snacks'. 'Veg moments' is likely a typo for 'veg momos'. The phrase 'that are really like' is incorrect; it should be 'that I really like'.