Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but there are some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing that affect naturalness. Try to use correct verb forms and clearer expressions, and avoid redundancy. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I usually eat snacks during my working hours, especially in the midmorning or afternoon. I prefer healthy options like nuts and fruits because they provide energy and help me stay focused. Additionally, eating these snacks acts as a stress relief and benefits my overall health.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but contains repetition and unclear phrases, which reduce clarity. Try to avoid repeating words and use precise vocabulary. Also, structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words.

例: I believe snacks can be healthy if eaten in moderation. However, eating too many snacks can negatively affect my body, such as causing weight gain. Therefore, as long as I limit my intake, snacks can be beneficial.

提案: Your answer provides relevant information but is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to organize your ideas more logically and use linking words to connect your points. Also, avoid filler words and improve sentence structure for clarity.

例: When I was young, I often ate snacks in the afternoon to give me energy. Also, my parents used to reward me with snacks whenever I achieved something, which made snacking enjoyable.

提案: Your answer is detailed and relevant, but there are minor grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use correct verb forms and clearer expressions. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and avoid redundancy.

例: I usually enjoy eating healthy snacks like nuts and fruits such as grapes, avocado, and apples. I find these snacks convenient and nutritious, which helps me stay focused during my studies. Moreover, eating while studying makes the experience more enjoyable and less stressful.

× Eating these snacks are act as a stress leaf and it's good for my overall health.

✓ Eating these snacks acts as a stress relief and it's good for my overall health.

The subject 'Eating these snacks' is singular, so the verb should be 'acts' instead of 'are'. Also, 'stress leaf' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'stress relief'. This correction ensures subject-verb agreement and corrects the noun phrase.

× Well I think snacks are healthy if I eat in in the limit because if I eat too much then it can be it can be effect on Vodafone effect on my body.

✓ Well, I think snacks are healthy if I eat within the limit because if I eat too much then it can have an effect on my body.

The phrase 'eat in in the limit' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'within' to indicate limits. Also, 'it can be effect on Vodafone effect on my body' is incorrect and unclear; it should be 'it can have an effect on my body'. This correction clarifies meaning and corrects preposition usage.

× Like I will gain my weight if I eat too much and it it's not good.

✓ Like I will gain weight if I eat too much and it's not good.

The phrase 'gain my weight' is incorrect; 'weight' is uncountable here and does not need 'my'. Removing 'my' makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× Did you often eat snacks when you were young?

✓ Did you often eat snacks when you were young?

This sentence is correct as it is in past tense and properly structured for the question.

× Well when I was young I used to eat snacks during the afternoon like during the day and it helps me to give some energy and because of whenever like I achieve anything then my parents gave me a reward as a snacks.

✓ Well, when I was young I used to eat snacks during the afternoon, and it helped me to get some energy because whenever I achieved something, my parents gave me a reward in the form of snacks.

The verb 'helps' should be in past tense 'helped' to match the past context. 'Give some energy' is better as 'get some energy'. 'Because of whenever like I achieve anything' is awkward; corrected to 'because whenever I achieved something'. 'Reward as a snacks' is incorrect; corrected to 'reward in the form of snacks'.

× Well, I usually enjoying eating healthy snacks like nuts, fruits such as grapes, avocado, apples and I find these snacks convenient and give me nutritions which help me to stay focused during my studies.

✓ Well, I usually enjoy eating healthy snacks like nuts and fruits such as grapes, avocado, and apples, and I find these snacks convenient and nutritious, which help me to stay focused during my studies.

The phrase 'I usually enjoying' is incorrect; it should be 'I usually enjoy' (base verb after 'usually'). 'Nouritions' is incorrect; 'nutritions' is uncountable and better replaced with 'nutritious'. Added commas for clarity.

× Eating while studying also makes the experience more enjoyable and less stressful.

✓ Eating while studying also makes the experience more enjoyable and less stressful.

This sentence is correct with proper preposition usage.