Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to use correct prepositions and avoid redundancy. For example, say "in the afternoon" instead of "at afternoon." Also, avoid repeating similar ideas like "keep healthy" and "feed and give energy" without clear distinction. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I usually eat snacks in the afternoon because healthy snacks help me stay energized and maintain my health throughout the day.

提案: Focus on clarity and avoid vague phrases like "improves my body health." Use more precise vocabulary and link your ideas logically. For example, explain how snacks contribute to fitness and energy with clear reasons.

例: Yes, I believe eating snacks daily is healthy because it provides me with energy and helps maintain my fitness by preventing hunger between meals.

提案: Work on sentence structure and grammar. Use past tense correctly and avoid filler words like "like well." Make your answer clearer and more coherent by organizing your ideas logically and using linking words.

例: Yes, when I was young, snacks were our favorite meals. My mother often made toast and omelets for me and my brother, which we really enjoyed.

提案: Improve sentence clarity and grammar. Use correct verb forms and article usage. Also, describe your favorite snack more naturally and avoid awkward phrasing like "I like to eat this is."

例: My favorite snack is toast made with bread, butter, lemon, eggs, and sausage. I've loved this snack since I was a child.

× I usually eat snacks at afternoon.

✓ I usually eat snacks in the afternoon.

The preposition 'at' is incorrect when referring to parts of the day. The correct preposition is 'in' for periods like 'the afternoon'.

× I eat healthy food because it helps me to keep healthy and feed and give energy for the next few hours.

✓ I eat healthy food because it helps me stay healthy and gives me energy for the next few hours.

The phrase 'keep healthy and feed and give energy' is awkward and incorrect. 'Keep healthy' should be 'stay healthy', and 'feed and give energy' is redundant; 'gives me energy' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× snacks was our favorite meal of day.

✓ Snacks were our favorite meal of the day.

The phrase 'meal of day' is missing the definite article 'the' before 'day'. Also, 'snacks' is plural, so the verb should be 'were' not 'was' (subject-verb agreement).

× snacks was our favorite meal of day.

✓ Snacks were our favorite meal of the day.

The subject 'snacks' is plural, so the verb must be plural 'were' instead of singular 'was'.

× I mean by hour and me and my brother, my mother usually makes some snacks like toast and omelet and it was so.

✓ I mean, my brother and I, my mother usually made some snacks like toast and omelet, and it was so.

The phrase 'by hour and me and my brother' is unclear and incorrect. It should be 'my brother and I'. Also, 'makes' should be past tense 'made' to match 'was'.

× my mother usually makes some snacks like toast and omelet and it was so.

✓ My mother usually made some snacks like toast and omelet, and it was so.

The sentence refers to past habits, so the verb 'makes' should be in past tense 'made' to maintain tense consistency.

× It makes with bread, some butter and lemons and also egg plus sausage.

✓ It is made with bread, some butter and lemon, and also egg plus sausage.

The phrase 'It makes with' is incorrect. The correct passive form is 'It is made with'. Also, 'lemons' should be singular 'lemon' when referring to a general ingredient.

× That's my favorite snack since my childhood and I like to eat this is.

✓ That's been my favorite snack since my childhood, and I like to eat it.

The sentence 'I like to eat this is' is ungrammatical. It should be 'I like to eat it'. Also, 'since my childhood' requires present perfect tense 'has been' to indicate duration from past to present.