Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答が少し不自然で文法的な誤りがあります。例えば、「because.」の後に文が続いていないため、意味が途切れています。また、内容が単純で、より具体的な説明や理由を加えると良いでしょう。

例: I usually eat snacks at 3:00 PM because I feel hungry around that time. I often choose sweets like chocolate or cookies to satisfy my craving.

提案: 文法の誤りがあり、例えば「it has high calorie」ではなく「they are high in calories」と表現すると自然です。また、理由をもう少し具体的に説明し、接続詞を使って論理的に話すと良いでしょう。

例: I think eating snacks is not healthy for me because they are high in calories and contain a lot of sugar, which can lead to health problems like obesity and diabetes.

提案: 時制の誤りがあります。「always eat」ではなく「always ate」が正しいです。また、文のつながりが不自然なので、接続詞を使って論理的に説明しましょう。

例: When I was a child, I always ate snacks because I loved sweets. Since my mother didn't tell me that snacks were bad for my health, I kept eating them frequently.

提案: 「sweets」と「snacks」の使い方が混乱しています。また、文法的な誤りや不自然な表現が多いです。理由を明確にし、接続詞を使って論理的に話す練習をしましょう。

例: I like to eat sweets such as chocolate and candy because they taste better than other snacks. Moreover, eating sweets helps me concentrate while studying and makes me feel happier when I face difficulties.

× I usually eat snacks at 3:00 PM because. I'm hungry during this time, I always eat sweets.

✓ I usually eat snacks at 3:00 PM because I'm hungry during this time, so I always eat sweets.

The original sentence has a period after 'because' which breaks the sentence incorrectly. Also, the two clauses should be connected properly with a conjunction like 'so' to show cause and effect. Correct sentence structure improves clarity.

× I think it is not healthy for me to eat snacks because it has high calorie.

✓ I think it is not healthy for me to eat snacks because they have high calories.

The word 'snacks' is plural, so the pronoun and verb should agree in number. 'It' should be 'they' and 'calorie' should be plural 'calories' to match the plural subject.

× Many kind of snacks have a lot of sugar so it bad for our health.

✓ Many kinds of snacks have a lot of sugar, so it is bad for our health.

'Kind' should be plural 'kinds' when referring to multiple types. Also, 'it bad' is missing the verb 'is' to be grammatically correct.

× When I was a child, I always eat snacks because I loved sweets.

✓ When I was a child, I always ate snacks because I loved sweets.

The sentence refers to a past time ('when I was a child'), so the verb 'eat' should be in the past tense 'ate' to maintain tense consistency.

× I saw my mother didn't tell me that snacks is bad for health, so I kept eating.

✓ My mother didn't tell me that snacks are bad for health, so I kept eating.

The phrase 'I saw my mother didn't tell me' is awkward and unnecessary. Also, 'snacks' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is'. Removing 'I saw' clarifies the sentence.

× I love sweets because it's more delicious than snacks.

✓ I love sweets because they are more delicious than snacks.

'Sweets' is plural, so the pronoun should be 'they' and the verb 'are' instead of 'it's' (it is). This ensures subject-pronoun agreement.

× It helps me to concentrate with study.

✓ It helps me to concentrate on studying.

The correct preposition after 'concentrate' is 'on'. Also, 'study' should be in the gerund form 'studying' to function as the object of the preposition.