Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by using correct sentence structures and avoiding repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then explain why you prefer snacks after dinner with specific reasons.

例: I usually eat snacks after dinner because I enjoy the taste and texture. For example, I like crunchy snacks that satisfy my cravings. However, I sometimes choose fruit as a healthier option.

提案: Improve your answer by organizing your ideas clearly and using linking words. Avoid vague phrases and explain your reasons with specific details. Also, correct grammar mistakes to make your answer more natural.

例: I don't think eating snacks is healthy because it can cause acne and weight gain. Therefore, I try to limit myself to eating snacks only once or twice a week to stay healthy.

提案: Make your answer more coherent by using proper sentence structures and linking words. Avoid repetition and clarify your points with specific details. For example, explain your parents' reasons and your habits clearly.

例: When I was young, I didn't eat many snacks because my parents didn't allow it. They believed snacks were unhealthy for children, so I rarely ate them.

提案: Focus on clear and correct sentence structures. Use linking words to compare past and present preferences. Provide specific names and descriptions of snacks to enrich your answer.

例: When I was young, I enjoyed eating fish snacks from China. Now, I like eating jerky from the USA because of its delicious flavors, which I find very satisfying.

× Currently, I usually eat snack ones are like after dinner because I for me personally, I really like eating some like snacks or fruit after dinners.

✓ Currently, I usually eat snacks, like after dinner, because personally, I really like eating snacks or fruit after dinner.

The word 'snack' should be plural 'snacks' to match the context of multiple items. Also, 'after dinners' should be singular 'after dinner' because it refers to the general time after a meal, not multiple dinners.

× Currently, I usually eat snack ones are like after dinner because I for me personally, I really like eating some like snacks or fruit after dinners.

✓ Currently, I usually eat snacks, like after dinner, because personally, I really like eating snacks or fruit after dinner.

The phrase 'ones are like' is incorrect and unnecessary. It should be removed or replaced with a clearer phrase such as 'like' to connect ideas properly.

× But I prefer snacks because the taste of it is really good and the textures, yeah, it's really like this is what I want and what I like.

✓ But I prefer snacks because the taste of them is really good and the textures, yeah, they're really like this is what I want and what I like.

The pronouns referring to 'snacks' should be plural ('them', 'they're') to agree with the plural noun.

× Oh no, I don't think snack is healthy for you to eat because like I said before, I really like eating snack after dinner but it's also cost a lot of acne and gains my weight so bad so like I prefer it is like once or twice a week because it's really unhealthy.

✓ Oh no, I don't think snacks are healthy for you to eat because, like I said before, I really like eating snacks after dinner but they also cause a lot of acne and make me gain weight badly, so I prefer to eat them only once or twice a week because it's really unhealthy.

The noun 'snack' should be plural 'snacks' to match the context. Also, verb agreement and other grammar issues corrected for clarity.

× Oh no, I don't think snack is healthy for you to eat because like I said before, I really like eating snack after dinner but it's also cost a lot of acne and gains my weight so bad so like I prefer it is like once or twice a week because it's really unhealthy.

✓ Oh no, I don't think snacks are healthy for you to eat because, like I said before, I really like eating snacks after dinner but they also cause a lot of acne and make me gain weight badly, so I prefer to eat them only once or twice a week because it's really unhealthy.

The verb 'cost' should be 'cause' to correctly express the effect. Also, 'gains' should be 'make me gain' to correctly express the action.

× Umm, when I was young, I like, I'm not too much it's snack because my parents didn't allow me to eat snack when I was young because it's really unhealthy for like young children to eat snack every day.

✓ Umm, when I was young, I didn't like snacks too much because my parents didn't allow me to eat snacks when I was young since it's really unhealthy for young children to eat snacks every day.

The verb 'like' should be in past tense 'didn't like' to match the past time frame. Also, 'snack' should be plural 'snacks' for consistency.

× Umm, when I was young, I like, I'm not too much it's snack because my parents didn't allow me to eat snack when I was young because it's really unhealthy for like young children to eat snack every day.

✓ Umm, when I was young, I didn't like snacks too much because my parents didn't allow me to eat snacks when I was young since it's really unhealthy for young children to eat snacks every day.

The noun 'snack' should be plural 'snacks' to refer to multiple items.

× So I haven't like it's, it took my snack when I was young because it's really unhealthy.

✓ So I didn't eat snacks when I was young because it's really unhealthy.

The phrase 'I haven't like it's, it took my snack' is incorrect and unclear. It should be replaced with 'I didn't eat snacks' to correctly express the past action.

× Like when I was a young, I really enjoy eating some snacks from China which just call us fish.

✓ Like when I was young, I really enjoyed eating some snacks from China which are just called fish.

'A young' is incorrect; it should be 'young'. Also, 'enjoy' should be past tense 'enjoyed' to match the past time frame. 'Just call us fish' should be 'just called fish' for correct passive form.

× Like when I was a young, I really enjoy eating some snacks from China which just call us fish.

✓ Like when I was young, I really enjoyed eating some snacks from China which are just called fish.

The verb 'enjoy' should be in past tense 'enjoyed' to match the past time frame.

× But currently I really into like Target study from USAI really enjoy eating it because the flavor of it, it's just my test and I really like all the flavor of it because it's make me feel so.

✓ But currently, I am really into a snack called Target Study from the USA. I really enjoy eating it because the flavor is just my taste and I really like all the flavors because it makes me feel good.

The phrase 'really into like Target study from USAI' is unclear and incorrect. It should be 'really into a snack called Target Study from the USA'. Also, 'make me feel so' is incomplete and should be 'makes me feel good'. Prepositions and articles corrected for clarity.