Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more concise and natural by avoiding redundancy and using linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, instead of 'whereas sometimes I have them when I get my cravings at night,' you can say 'and occasionally at night when I crave something.'

例: I usually eat snacks in the middle of the day after lunch, and occasionally at night when I crave something.

提案: Improve your answer by using consistent verb tenses and clearer linking words. Also, avoid redundancy and make your points more specific. For example, use 'helps' instead of 'helped' to keep present tense and link ideas with 'because'.

例: Although eating snacks can sometimes increase appetite, I don't worry because having them in the middle of the day or after meals helps me stay active and focused by providing extra energy.

提案: Make your answer clearer and more natural by avoiding repetition and using linking words like 'but' and 'so'. Also, try to be more specific about the types of desserts.

例: No, I used to follow a strict diet with only my personal meals, but as I grew older, I developed a sweet tooth, so I started snacking on various desserts like cakes and cookies.

提案: Your answer is clear and concise, but you can improve it by adding a reason or example to make it more specific and engaging.

例: I prefer sweet snacks, such as different types of chocolate and desserts, because they satisfy my cravings and give me a quick energy boost.

× For me, having snacks in the middle of the day or after meals provide extra energy, which helped me stay active and focused.

✓ For me, having snacks in the middle of the day or after meals provides extra energy, which helps me stay active and focused.

The subject 'having snacks' is singular, so the verb should be 'provides' to agree in number (subject-verb agreement). Also, the phrase 'which helped me' should be in present tense 'helps me' to maintain consistency with the present context of the sentence.