Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains some grammatical errors, such as "Do I need work for us?" which does not relate to the question. Try to respond directly and clearly, using simple and correct sentences. Also, avoid repeating phrases like "I prefer to have some snacks" twice. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I usually eat snacks in the evening after I come back home from a nap. I like to have fresh foods such as dates, fresh fruits, and vegetables because they are healthy and refreshing.

提案: Your answer is relevant and mostly clear, but it could be improved by adding linking words and more specific details. For example, explain why these snacks are healthy and how they help you focus. Also, try to avoid repeating "fresh fruit and fresh vegetable"; you can say "fresh fruits and vegetables" instead.

例: Yes, I think eating snacks like fresh fruits, vegetables, and dates is healthy because they contain vitamins and natural sugars. These snacks give me energy and help me concentrate better during my studies.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has some grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing, such as "my siblings and all hang out" and "when we wanted to playing." Try to use correct verb forms and clearer sentence structures. Also, use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: Yes, when I was young, my siblings and I often hung out together in the evenings. We used to eat cookies and biscuits while enjoying each other's company, which gave us energy to play games afterwards.

提案: Your answer is somewhat confusing and contains unclear phrases like "I see some I have a sweet tooth." Try to express your ideas more clearly and directly. Also, avoid repeating "I prefer" twice; instead, use linking words to contrast your preferences. Provide a clear explanation of your choices.

例: To be honest, I have a sweet tooth and like desserts such as cake and candies. However, I usually avoid them and prefer to eat healthier snacks like dates and fresh fruits instead.

× Do I need work for us?

✓ Do I need to work for us?

The sentence is missing the infinitive marker 'to' before the verb 'work'. In English, after modal verbs or auxiliary verbs like 'need', the base form of the verb is used with 'to' to form the infinitive. Therefore, 'need work' should be 'need to work'. This correction improves sentence clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I prefer to have some snacks like fresh foods and fresh vegetables and especially when I come back home after taking nap in the evening, I prefer to have some snacks like dates, fresh fruits and the like.

✓ I prefer to have some snacks like fresh food and fresh vegetables, and especially when I come back home after taking a nap in the evening, I prefer to have some snacks like dates, fresh fruit and the like.

The word 'foods' is generally uncountable when referring to types of food collectively, so 'food' is preferred. Also, 'nap' is a countable noun and requires an article 'a' before it. Similarly, 'fruits' can be uncountable when referring to fruit in general, so 'fruit' is more appropriate here. These corrections align with standard English usage.

× Since I prefer to have fresh fruit and fresh vegetable and dates for snacks, I believe that they are really healthy and they provide energy for me to focus better.

✓ Since I prefer to have fresh fruit, fresh vegetables and dates for snacks, I believe that they are really healthy and they provide energy for me to focus better.

The word 'vegetable' should be plural 'vegetables' because it refers to multiple types or pieces of vegetables. This correction ensures subject consistency and proper plural usage.

× Yes, my siblings and all hang out with each other especially in the evening.

✓ Yes, my siblings and I all hung out with each other especially in the evening.

The sentence refers to a past event ('Did you often eat snacks when you were young?'), so the verb should be in the past tense. 'Hang out' in past tense is 'hung out'. Also, 'and all' is better expressed as 'and I all' to clarify the subject. This correction aligns the verb tense with the question context.

× We had lots of cookies, biscuits and the like with each other and we could enjoy each other's company and it could raise our energy when we wanted to playing with each other.

✓ We had lots of cookies, biscuits and the like together, and we could enjoy each other's company, which could raise our energy when we wanted to play with each other.

The phrase 'with each other' is awkward here; 'together' is more natural. The clause 'when we wanted to playing' is incorrect; after 'wanted to', the base form 'play' should be used, not the gerund 'playing'. Also, the sentence is long and benefits from commas and conjunctions for clarity. These corrections improve grammatical accuracy and readability.

× To be honest, I see some I have a sweet tooth.

✓ To be honest, I see that I have a sweet tooth.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'that' after 'I see' completes the sentence and clarifies the meaning. This correction fixes sentence structure and coherence.

× I prefer to have dessert, cake and candies and the like, but I always avoid it.

✓ I prefer to have dessert, cake and candies and the like, but I always avoid them.

The pronoun 'it' is singular, but 'dessert, cake and candies' is plural. Therefore, the plural pronoun 'them' should be used to agree with the plural antecedent. This correction ensures pronoun agreement.