Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如“keep all balanced doubt”表达不清晰，建议使用更准确的表达方式。同时，回答较长且有些冗余，可以更简洁地表达。

例: I usually avoid snacks to stay healthy, but sometimes I eat chocolate bars when watching movies alone.

提案: 回答内容较好，但存在拼写错误（snakes应为snacks），建议注意拼写准确性。同时可以使用更多连接词使表达更连贯。

例: It depends. Generally, most snacks are unhealthy because they contain too much sugar and salt. However, if you choose fruits as snacks, they can be good for your health.

提案: 回答结构清晰，内容具体，但可以使用更多连接词使句子更流畅，同时注意时态一致性。

例: Yes, definitely. I used to have snacks at least once a week when I was a child. Whenever I went to the supermarket with my mom, I would beg her to buy some snacks so I could enjoy snack time.

提案: 回答中表达不够自然，且存在语法错误（如“all the days”用法不当）。建议简化句子结构，使用更自然的表达。

例: To be honest, I used to love junk food as snacks, which was high in calories and unhealthy. But nowadays, I usually have soda, cookies, and chocolate bars instead.

× Recently I have been trying to keep all balanced doubt and stay healthy, so I barely have snacks now, but when I am watching movie myself I can't help to have some chocolate bars at home.

✓ Recently I have been trying to keep all balanced diet and stay healthy, so I barely have snacks now, but when I am watching a movie by myself I can't help having some chocolate bars at home.

句中“can't help to have”用法错误，正确表达是“can't help + 动词-ing形式”，表示“忍不住做某事”。此外，“watching movie”缺少冠词，应为“watching a movie”。“all balanced doubt”应为“all balanced diet”，原句中“doubt”用词错误。

× Recently I have been trying to keep all balanced doubt and stay healthy, so I barely have snacks now, but when I am watching movie myself I can't help to have some chocolate bars at home.

✓ Recently I have been trying to keep all balanced diet and stay healthy, so I barely have snacks now, but when I am watching a movie by myself I can't help having some chocolate bars at home.

“watching movie myself”中缺少介词“by”，正确表达是“watching a movie by myself”，表示“我自己看电影”。

× Recently I have been trying to keep all balanced doubt and stay healthy, so I barely have snacks now, but when I am watching movie myself I can't help to have some chocolate bars at home.

✓ Recently I have been trying to keep a balanced diet and stay healthy, so I barely have snacks now, but when I am watching a movie by myself I can't help having some chocolate bars at home.

“all balanced doubt”中“all”用法不当，应改为“不定冠词a”修饰“balanced diet”，且“doubt”应为“diet”，表示“均衡饮食”。

× But if you choose fruits as snakes, I think it's good for your health.

✓ But if you choose fruits as snacks, I think it's good for your health.

“snakes”拼写错误，应为“snacks”，表示“零食”。

× Yes, definitely. I used to have snacks at least once a week when I was a child. Every time I went to the supermarket with my mom, I would beg her to buy some snacks for me so I can enjoy the snack time.

✓ Yes, definitely. I used to have snacks at least once a week when I was a child. Every time I went to the supermarket with my mom, I would beg her to buy some snacks for me so I could enjoy the snack time.

“so I can enjoy”时态不一致，前文为过去时，后文应使用过去时态“could”表示过去的能力或可能性。

× To be honest, I used to love junk food for my snack time which was high in calories and pretty unhealthy, but now all the days I would just have some soda, cookies and chocolate bars instead.

✓ To be honest, I used to love junk food for my snack time which was high in calories and pretty unhealthy, but nowadays I just have some soda, cookies and chocolate bars instead.

“now all the days”表达不自然，应改为“nowadays”表示“现在”；“would just have”在此处不合适，改为一般现在时“just have”，因为描述的是现在的习惯。