Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时表达不够自然，存在语法错误和重复，且内容较为模糊。建议简洁明了地说明具体时间，并避免重复和语法错误。

例: I usually eat snacks in the afternoon and sometimes late at night when I feel hungry.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不清晰。建议使用简单句表达观点，并用连词连接原因，内容更具体。

例: No, I don't think eating snacks is healthy, but it helps me relax and reduce stress after a busy day.

提案: 回答中有重复和语法错误，表达不够流畅。建议直接回答并用具体细节丰富内容，避免重复。

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because it was a happy time and created many precious memories.

提案: 回答中有重复词汇，表达稍显啰嗦。建议用更丰富的词汇描述喜欢的零食，并简洁表达感受。

例: I like to eat Little Bear soft candy because it's sweet, juicy, and reminds me of my happiest childhood memories.

× I think it does have a certain time.

✓ I think it does have a certain time.

该句中“does have”用法虽不常见，但语法上正确，表示强调，因此无需修改。

× Maybe I will eat snacks in the morning, in the afternoon, maybe even in the evening. And of course maybe even at the mid in the in the midnight.

✓ Maybe I will eat snacks in the morning, in the afternoon, maybe even in the evening. And of course maybe even in the middle of the night.

“at the mid in the in the midnight”表达不正确，正确用法是“in the middle of the night”，表示“在半夜”。介词和短语搭配错误。

× I mean, what whatever you want to.

✓ I mean, whatever you want to.

“what whatever”重复使用，造成语法错误，应去掉“what”，只保留“whatever”。

× No, I don't think so. But even though its next can can cannot bring me any healthy, any health but it it's a very relaxing and happy and pleasant way to relieve my stress of of the whole day.

✓ No, I don't think so. But even though snacks cannot bring me any health benefits, it's a very relaxing, happy, and pleasant way to relieve my stress of the whole day.

“its next can can cannot”语法混乱，且“healthy”用作名词错误，应改为“health benefits”。重复词“of of”需删除。

× Did you often eat snacks when you were young? Student: Yes, I did. I, I think most of teenager or young adults, teenagers or young adults often eat snacks when they are within in childhood because it's not just a happy time, it's a very precious memory for for us.

✓ Yes, I did. I think most teenagers or young adults often ate snacks when they were children because it was not just a happy time, it was a very precious memory for us.

“most of teenager or young adults”应为“most teenagers or young adults”，名词复数形式错误。时态应与过去时间状语一致，改为过去时“ate”和“were”。“within in childhood”表达错误，应为“were children”。重复词“for for”需删除。

× I think I'd like to eat the the Little Bear soft sugar.

✓ I think I'd like to eat Little Bear soft sugar.

“the the”重复，且品牌名通常不加定冠词“the”，应删除多余的“the”。