Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达不够清晰，语法和词汇使用有误，导致意思难以理解。建议简化句子结构，使用正确的时态和词汇，并且直接回答问题。

例: I usually eat snacks around 7 or 8 in the evening, just after dinner. I avoid eating snacks before dinner because I want to enjoy my mother's cooking and not spoil my appetite.

提案: 回答内容混乱，表达不清楚。建议用简单明了的句子表达观点，并说明原因。

例: I think eating snacks can be healthy if I choose the right ones. My mother tells me to avoid unhealthy snacks, so I usually eat fruits or drink water instead.

提案: 回答不连贯，语法错误多，难以理解。建议先直接回答问题，然后用一两句具体细节支持观点。

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young, especially during exams. Even though my mother told me not to, I liked eating snacks because they made me feel happy.

提案: 表达有些混乱，词汇使用不准确。建议用更准确的词汇描述喜欢的零食，并说明原因。

例: I like to eat fruits as snacks because they are healthy and provide water. There are many kinds of fruits, so I can enjoy different ones every day.

× New Italy Isnae's Apollo from 7 or 8 evening just after dinner because if I ate it before dinner I can't eat too much food my mother has made for me and if I just eat a little she will think I don't like the food she make.

✓ Normally, I eat snacks from 7 or 8 in the evening just after dinner because if I eat them before dinner, I can't eat too much food my mother has made for me, and if I just eat a little, she will think I don't like the food she makes.

句中“from 7 or 8 evening”应改为“from 7 or 8 in the evening”，表示时间点需要介词“in”。此外，“she make”应为“she makes”，主谓一致。

× if I ate it before dinner I can't eat too much food my mother has made for me

✓ if I eat it before dinner, I can't eat too much food my mother has made for me

条件句中描述习惯动作时，应使用一般现在时，不能用过去时“ate”，应改为“eat”。

× she make

✓ she makes

主语是第三人称单数，谓语动词应加-s，故“make”应改为“makes”。

× US goes next to IAS actually to be froze or some drink and my mother also tell me I cannot create some unhealthy food so the food I can eat must be she think it is health so it will not hurt me.

✓ I usually eat snacks like frozen food or some drinks, and my mother also tells me I cannot eat unhealthy food, so the food I can eat must be what she thinks is healthy so it will not hurt me.

句中“US goes next to IAS”无意义，应改为“I usually eat snacks”。“tell”应为“tells”，主谓一致。动词“create”用错，应为“eat”。“she think it is health”应改为“she thinks it is healthy”，且“health”应为形容词“healthy”。

× Yusuf was beyond the high school with snacks, especially yes, when I was young.

✓ I often ate snacks when I was in high school, especially when I was young.

“was beyond the high school”表达错误，应为“was in high school”。“ate”用过去时，符合时间背景。

× I'm actually lying like in the exams, even though I will not listen to my mother.

✓ I actually liked eating snacks during exams, even though I did not listen to my mother.

“lying”用错，应为“liked”。“will not listen”应改为过去时“did not listen”，与上下文时间一致。

× I don't eat that.

✓ I still ate them.

根据上下文，学生想表达“我还是吃了”，用否定“don't eat”不合适，应改为肯定过去时。

× I think it is delicious and.

✓ I think they are delicious.

句子不完整，且“it”应指复数“they”，因为指代零食。

× I would work, it will make me happy so I like that even though they are unhealthy.

✓ I would eat them because it makes me happy, so I like that even though they are unhealthy.

“work”用错，应为“eat”。“it will make me happy”时态应与前文一致，改为“it makes me happy”。

× All the snakes are like you eat must be fruits and I think it is healthy and also it can supply some water.

✓ All the snacks I like to eat must be fruits, and I think they are healthy and also can supply some water.

“snakes”应为“snacks”。“it is healthy”应改为“they are healthy”，因为指复数“fruits”。

× For me they are delicious, of course, because they are so much kind of fruits and I can eat this one today and next week.

✓ For me, they are delicious, of course, because there are so many kinds of fruits, and I can eat different ones today and next week.

“so much kind of fruits”应为“so many kinds of fruits”，表示多种类水果。句子结构调整使表达更清晰。