Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时语言不够自然，有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，使用更准确的词汇表达情绪和习惯。

例: Recently, I often eat snacks because I feel stressed. I usually eat chocolate and drink bubble tea every day, which has caused me to gain a lot of weight.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够连贯。建议使用连词连接句子，表达观点时更清晰，避免重复。

例: I don't think eating too many snacks is healthy. Drinking a lot of bubble tea might cause diabetes in the future, which scares me because then I couldn't eat sweet foods anymore.

提案: 回答较为完整，但语言表达不够自然，存在语法错误。建议简化句子，使用更自然的表达方式，并注意时态一致。

例: No, when I was young, I didn't like eating snacks or even regular meals. Even though my mom bought me ice cream, chocolate, or French fries, I didn't enjoy eating them.

提案: 回答中语法错误严重，表达不连贯，且有夸张不合理的内容。建议使用简单句子，避免夸张，表达清楚喜欢的零食种类和原因。

例: I like eating chocolate, cookies, and drinking bubble tea. However, I know I should control myself because eating too many snacks is expensive and unhealthy.

× Recently I have to say I hit the snack all the time.

✓ Recently I have to say I have been hitting the snacks all the time.

这里描述的是最近持续发生的动作，应该使用现在完成进行时态，表示动作从过去持续到现在。原句使用了一般过去时，时态不准确。

× I need to eat a countless snacks to bring some dopamine to me and lift my spirit.

✓ I need to eat countless snacks to bring some dopamine to me and lift my spirit.

'countless'是形容词，修饰复数名词时不需要冠词'a'，'a countless snacks'是不正确的搭配。

× I always ate the chocolate, the bubble teas every day and I gained so many weight now.

✓ I always ate chocolate and bubble teas every day and I have gained so much weight now.

'chocolate'和'bubble teas'前不需要定冠词'the'，因为这里指的是泛指的食物。'weight'是不可数名词，不能用'many'，应使用'much'。

× Definitely no drinking so much bubble teas would cause me a diabetes maybe in the future.

✓ Definitely drinking so much bubble tea could cause me to get diabetes maybe in the future.

原句中'modal verb'使用不当，'no drinking'结构不正确，应使用肯定句表达可能性，且'diabetes'前不加冠词'a'。

× Definitely no drinking so much bubble teas would cause me a diabetes maybe in the future.

✓ Definitely drinking so much bubble tea could cause me to get diabetes maybe in the future.

'bubble teas'应为不可数名词'bubble tea'，表示饮料的总称。

× I'm so scared to get to get this disease.

✓ I'm so scared of getting this disease.

表达害怕某事时，通常用'scared of doing something'结构，且不需要重复'to get'。

× It means I couldn't eat more sweet food it would kill me.

✓ It means I can't eat more sweet food; it would kill me.

这里表达现在或将来的能力或可能性，应该用情态动词'can't'，而不是过去式'couldn't'。

× when I was young, it is quite surprising that I just dislike to eat something, both the snacks or some formal meals.

✓ When I was young, it was quite surprising that I just disliked eating things, both snacks and some formal meals.

描述过去的情况，时态应为过去时。'dislike to eat'应改为'disliked eating'，更符合英语习惯。

× So at that time even my mom always bought me some ice cream, chocolate or French fries.

✓ So at that time, even though my mom always bought me some ice cream, chocolate, or French fries,

句子结构不完整，需补充连接词使句子完整。

× I just dislike to eat them.

✓ I just disliked eating them.

描述过去的习惯，时态应为过去时，且'dislike to eat'不符合习惯用法，改为'disliked eating'。

× Recently I ate so much chocolate, cookies and bubble teas.

✓ Recently I have eaten so much chocolate, cookies, and bubble tea.

'Recently'表示最近一段时间，应该用现在完成时，且'bubble teas'应为不可数名词'bubble tea'。

× I even could drink 22 bottles of milk tea in a day and it really cost me an arm and a leg.

✓ I could even drink 22 bottles of milk tea in a day, and it really costs me an arm and a leg.

'cost'应与主语一致，使用第三人称单数形式'costs'。

× But I it just couldn't stop to eating all of these snacks.

✓ But I just can't stop eating all of these snacks.

'stop'后应接动名词形式，且句子中多余的'it'应删除，时态应与上下文一致。