Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: คำตอบของคุณควรชัดเจนและเป็นธรรมชาติมากขึ้น โดยเริ่มด้วยประโยคหลักที่ตอบคำถามโดยตรง และใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อเชื่อมโยงรายละเอียดเพิ่มเติม นอกจากนี้ควรใช้คำศัพท์ที่เหมาะสมและถูกต้อง เช่น แทนที่จะพูดว่า 'embassy studying' ควรใช้ 'studying' หรือ 'working' อย่างถูกต้อง และหลีกเลี่ยงคำที่ไม่สมบูรณ์หรือผิดไวยากรณ์

例: I usually eat snacks when I feel very hungry but don't have time to prepare a full meal. For example, when I am busy studying or working, I might grab a small packet of nuts or a fruit to keep me energized until my next meal.

提案: คำตอบควรมีความชัดเจนและถูกต้องทางไวยากรณ์มากขึ้น รวมถึงใช้คำศัพท์ที่เหมาะสม เช่น 'Vegas' ควรเป็น 'fat' หรือ 'calories' และควรใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อเชื่อมโยงความคิด นอกจากนี้ควรหลีกเลี่ยงข้อผิดพลาดทางไวยากรณ์และคำที่ไม่สมบูรณ์

例: I don't think eating snacks is very healthy because they often contain a lot of sugar and fat. Therefore, I usually only eat snacks when I am very hungry between meals, but I try to avoid them most of the time to maintain my health.

提案: คำตอบควรมีโครงสร้างที่ชัดเจนและถูกต้องทางไวยากรณ์ รวมถึงใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อเชื่อมโยงประโยค และหลีกเลี่ยงคำที่ไม่สมบูรณ์หรือผิดพลาด เช่น 'What a fun part of my shoe' ควรแก้เป็นประโยคที่มีความหมายชัดเจน นอกจากนี้ควรใช้คำศัพท์ที่เหมาะสมและหลีกเลี่ยงการใช้คำซ้ำ

例: When I was young, I loved eating snacks and did so almost every day. For example, I often enjoyed sweet treats like cookies and candies because they tasted delicious and made me happy. Eating snacks was a fun part of my childhood.

提案: คำตอบควรใช้คำศัพท์ที่ถูกต้องและเหมาะสม เช่น 'chocolate bar' ควรใช้ 'chocolate bars' และ 'Eating these trees' ควรแก้เป็น 'Eating these treats' นอกจากนี้ควรใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อเชื่อมโยงประโยคและหลีกเลี่ยงข้อผิดพลาดทางไวยากรณ์

例: I really enjoy eating sweet snacks like chocolate bars and cookies because they satisfy my sweet tooth. I usually have them in the afternoon to boost my energy when I feel a bit tired. Eating these treats always makes me happy and refreshed.

× A usually is that when I feel very hungry but don't have time to prepare a full meal.

✓ Usually, when I feel very hungry but don't have time to prepare a full meal, I eat snacks.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and structure, making it unclear. The correction rearranges the sentence to a proper structure with the adverb 'usually' at the beginning, followed by the condition and the main action, improving clarity and grammatical correctness.

× For example, if embassy studying or working, I might grab some foods or small packet of just to keep me going until my next meal.

✓ For example, if I am studying or working, I might grab some food or a small packet of snacks just to keep me going until my next meal.

The original sentence misuses 'embassy' instead of 'I am' and has incorrect noun forms like 'foods' and missing words. The correction replaces 'embassy' with 'I am', changes 'foods' to 'food' (uncountable), and adds missing articles and words for clarity and correctness.

× I might grab some foods or small packet of just to keep me going until my next meal.

✓ I might grab some food or a small packet of snacks just to keep me going until my next meal.

'Foods' is generally uncountable in this context and should be 'food'. Also, 'small packet of' needs a noun after it, so 'snacks' is added. The article 'a' is necessary before 'small packet' to be grammatically correct.

× I don't think eating snacks is very healthy because they often contain a lot of sugar and Vegas.

✓ I don't think eating snacks is very healthy because they often contain a lot of sugar and fats.

The word 'Vegas' is incorrect here; it seems to be a typo for 'fats'. Correcting it to 'fats' makes the sentence meaningful and grammatically correct.

× I usually only eat snack when I am very hungry between meals, but I try to avoid them most of the time.

✓ I usually only eat snacks when I am very hungry between meals, but I try to avoid them most of the time.

'Snack' should be plural 'snacks' because it refers to an unspecified quantity in general. Using plural form is correct when talking about snacks in general.

× Eating too many snacks can lead to your problem, so I feel to eat my last meals instead.

✓ Eating too many snacks can lead to health problems, so I prefer to eat my main meals instead.

The phrase 'your problem' is vague and incorrect; 'health problems' is more appropriate. 'I feel to eat' is incorrect; 'I prefer to eat' is the correct expression. Also, 'last meals' is unclear; 'main meals' is more natural.

× When I was young, I really love eating snacks so I did it almost every day.

✓ When I was young, I really loved eating snacks, so I did it almost every day.

The sentence mixes past and present tense. Since the time frame is in the past ('When I was young'), the verb 'love' should be in past tense 'loved' to maintain tense consistency.

× For example, I often enjoy sweet treats like cookies and candies because they taste delicious and made me happy.

✓ For example, I often enjoyed sweet treats like cookies and candy because they tasted delicious and made me happy.

Since the sentence refers to past time, verbs should be in past tense ('enjoyed', 'tasted'). Also, 'candies' is less common than 'candy' as an uncountable noun in this context.

× Eating snacks, What a fun part of my shoe.

✓ Eating snacks was a fun part of my childhood.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'What a fun part of my shoe' is incorrect and likely a typo for 'childhood'. The correction forms a complete sentence with proper structure and meaning.

× I really enjoy eating sweet snacks like chocolate bar and cookies because they satisfy my sweet tooth.

✓ I really enjoy eating sweet snacks like chocolate bars and cookies because they satisfy my sweet tooth.

'Chocolate bar' should be plural 'chocolate bars' to match the plural 'snacks' and maintain consistency in listing multiple items.

× Eating these trees always makes me happy and react.

✓ Eating these treats always makes me happy and relaxed.

'Trees' is a typo for 'treats'. Also, 'react' is incorrect in this context; 'relaxed' fits the intended meaning better.