Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a direct response with clear reasons and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: I usually don't eat snacks because I think they are unhealthy due to their salty and savory taste. However, sometimes I eat them to relax and unwind while watching TV.

提案: Your answer is confusing and lacks clarity. Provide a clear opinion and support it with specific examples. Use correct vocabulary and linking words to improve coherence.

例: I think the healthiness of snacks depends on the type. Salty and flavorful snacks are usually unhealthy, but snacks like nuts or milk-based products are healthier options.

提案: Your answer has some good content but contains grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Use correct verb forms and provide a clear sequence of events with linking words.

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young. I usually gave my mother pocket money to buy snacks at the school gate. However, sometimes my mom was strict and didn't allow me to eat them.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains errors. Clearly state your favorite snack and explain why you like it. Use correct vocabulary and linking words to connect your ideas.

例: I like to eat cornstarch snacks because they have an attractive flavor. I usually eat them while typing, watching movies, or playing games to help me relax and unwind.

× Actually, I really don't. Eat snacks now because it is.

✓ Actually, I really don't eat snacks now because I think they are savory and salty.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks proper sentence structure. 'I really don't.' is incomplete and 'Eat snacks now because it is.' is unclear. Combining them into a complete sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I think it's savory and salty and it's maybe brings me unhealthy so I didn't get it and but sometimes I eat it to relax and unwind whenever I watch it.

✓ I think they're savory and salty, and they may be unhealthy, so I don't eat them often, but sometimes I eat them to relax and unwind whenever I watch TV.

The original sentence misuses conjunctions and has awkward phrasing. 'and it's maybe brings me unhealthy' is incorrect; 'they may be unhealthy' is correct. Also, 'didn't get it' is inappropriate; 'don't eat them often' fits better. 'whenever I watch it' is vague; specifying 'TV' clarifies the meaning.

× Well I think it depends on what stance that I eat.

✓ Well, I think it depends on what snacks I eat.

'Stance' is incorrect in this context; the correct word is 'snacks'. Also, 'depends on what stance that I eat' is awkward; 'depends on what snacks I eat' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× If a snack like so salty and very flavor is really not bad and unhealthy but it's just like nurse or milk as will be more healthy.

✓ If a snack is very salty and flavorful, it is really bad and unhealthy, but snacks like nuts or milk are healthier.

The original sentence has incorrect adjective usage ('so salty and very flavor') and unclear words ('nurse'). Correct adjectives and nouns ('salty and flavorful', 'nuts') improve clarity. Also, 'more healthy' should be 'healthier'.

× Yes, definitely. I usually snap.

✓ Yes, definitely. I usually snack.

'Snap' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'snack'. This is a singular/plural form issue where the verb form does not match the intended meaning.

× When I was a kid I often gave my my mother pocket money to get some snack at the gate of the school.

✓ When I was a kid, I often gave my mother pocket money to get some snacks at the school gate.

The sentence has a repeated pronoun 'my my' and awkward word order. Also, 'some snack' should be plural 'some snacks'. 'At the gate of the school' is better phrased as 'at the school gate'.

× But sometimes my mom is so strict and I I don't eat it.

✓ But sometimes my mom was so strict that I didn't eat them.

The sentence has repeated pronoun 'I I' and tense inconsistency. 'Mom is' should be past tense 'mom was' to match 'didn't eat'. Also, 'it' should be 'them' to refer to plural 'snacks'.

× Well, I love cornstarch because its flavor is really attractive and I usually eat it when I keyboard or sometimes watch movies or play games.

✓ Well, I love corn snacks because their flavor is really attractive, and I usually eat them when I type on the keyboard or sometimes watch movies or play games.

'Cornstarch' is incorrect; likely meant 'corn snacks'. 'Its flavor' should be 'their flavor' for plural. 'When I keyboard' is incorrect; 'when I type on the keyboard' is correct.

× I either to relax and invite.

✓ I eat them to relax and unwind.

The original sentence is incomplete and uses 'either' incorrectly. The corrected sentence completes the thought and uses appropriate verbs 'eat', 'relax', and 'unwind'.