Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but can be improved by making it more natural and concise. Avoid unnecessary phrases like "because I can" and use correct prepositions such as "in the evening". Also, try to link your ideas smoothly.

例: I usually eat snacks in the evening around 5 or 6 PM because I have my lunch quite early, at 12 or 1 PM.

提案: Your answer covers the main idea but can be improved by using more natural expressions and correct grammar. For example, say "In my opinion" instead of "In my honest opinion" and use plural forms correctly. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas better.

例: In my opinion, eating snacks can be healthy if they are fruits, dried fruits, or nuts. However, junk food snacks are not healthy.

提案: Your answer is a bit repetitive and has grammatical errors. Try to avoid repeating phrases like "when I was young" and use past tense consistently. Also, organise your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words.

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young. Since I went to school daily, I usually had snacks like fried rice, samosas, and noodles during the lunch break.

提案: Your answer is clear but can be improved by using better sentence structure and linking words. Avoid filler words like "Umm" and use singular/plural forms correctly. Also, try to express your opinion more naturally.

例: I like many types of snacks, especially noodles, pizzas, and burgers. Although these are junk foods and not very healthy, I enjoy eating them a lot.

× Generally, I consume my snacks at evening at the time of five or 6:00 PM because I can.

✓ Generally, I consume my snacks in the evening at around five or 6:00 PM because I can.

The preposition 'at' is incorrect before 'evening'; the correct preposition is 'in' for parts of the day like morning, afternoon, evening. Also, 'at the time of five or 6:00 PM' is awkward; 'at around five or 6:00 PM' is more natural.

× However, if the snacks is fruits or dry fruits or any nuts that is available is very healthy.

✓ However, if the snacks are fruits or dry fruits or any nuts that are available, they are very healthy.

The subject 'snacks' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' not 'is'. Also, 'any nuts that is available' should be 'any nuts that are available' to agree in number. The sentence also needs a comma and 'they are' to complete the thought.

× Yes, I used to eat snacks when I was young because when I was young I daily go to school to study and at the lunch break I used to eat snacks like fried rice, samosas, noodles etcetera and many others.

✓ Yes, I used to eat snacks when I was young because when I was young I used to go to school daily to study and at the lunch break I used to eat snacks like fried rice, samosas, noodles etcetera and many others.

The phrase 'I daily go to school' is incorrect in past tense context; it should be 'I used to go to school daily' to maintain past tense consistency.

× Although junk food are unhealthy but also I would like to eat it very much.

✓ Although junk food is unhealthy, I would still like to eat it very much.

'Junk food' is an uncountable noun and takes singular verb 'is' not 'are'. Also, 'although' and 'but' should not be used together; 'although' alone suffices. The sentence is corrected for clarity and grammar.