Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevabınızda bazı dilbilgisi hataları ve tekrarlar var. Daha doğal ve akıcı bir cevap için cümlelerinizi daha kısa ve net yapmalı, gereksiz tekrarları önlemelisiniz. Ayrıca, bağlaçlar kullanarak cümleler arasında daha iyi bağlantı kurabilirsiniz.

例: I usually eat snacks before work because I don't have enough time to prepare and eat breakfast. Since my work starts very early, having a small snack helps me stay energized.

提案: Cümlenizde bazı dilbilgisi hataları ve anlam belirsizlikleri var. Daha açık ve doğru ifadeler kullanmalı, ayrıca bağlaçlarla cümleleri daha tutarlı hale getirmelisiniz.

例: I think snacks are generally unhealthy because they often contain many chemicals. However, eating them in small amounts might not cause problems. But honestly, I don't have enough information about this topic.

提案: Cevabınızda zaman uyumu ve dilbilgisi hataları mevcut. Ayrıca, cümleleriniz biraz karışık ve tekrar içeriyor. Daha doğru zaman kullanımı ve net ifadelerle cümlenizi geliştirebilirsiniz.

例: Yes, I used to eat more snacks when I was young because I didn't know if they were healthy. I ate them simply because I liked the taste. But now, as an adult, I prefer not to eat many snacks.

提案: Cevabınız açık ve anlaşılır ancak daha çeşitli kelimeler kullanarak ve bağlaçlarla cümleleri zenginleştirerek daha etkili hale getirebilirsiniz.

例: I enjoy eating chocolate and chips because they taste good and are easy to eat. Therefore, I usually choose them when I have time for a snack.

× I cannot have breakfast before my work start because I don't have enough time to prepare breakfast and eat that.

✓ I cannot have breakfast before my work starts because I don't have enough time to prepare breakfast and eat it.

The verb 'start' should be in the third person singular present tense 'starts' to agree with the singular subject 'my work'. Also, 'eat that' is better expressed as 'eat it' for natural English usage.

× That's why I like to eat small snacks before my work start.

✓ That's why I like to eat small snacks before my work starts.

The verb 'start' should be 'starts' to agree with the singular subject 'my work' in the present tense.

× I have don't take enough information about that.

✓ I don't have enough information about that.

The phrase 'have don't take' is incorrect. The correct form is 'don't have' to express lack of information. Also, 'take information' is unnatural; 'have information' is correct.

× Yes, I used to eat more snacks when I am young, when I was young because I didn't know enough information about whether they are healthy or not.

✓ Yes, I used to eat more snacks when I was young because I didn't have enough information about whether they were healthy or not.

The phrase 'when I am young' should be 'when I was young' to match past tense. Also, 'didn't know enough information' is better as 'didn't have enough information'. The clause 'whether they are healthy' should be 'whether they were healthy' to maintain past tense consistency.

× I just if I liked its taste, I eat them.

✓ I just ate them if I liked their taste.

The sentence structure is awkward. Using past tense 'ate' fits better with 'liked'. Also, 'its taste' should be 'their taste' to agree with plural 'them'.

× But this nowadays I am a adult, I don't like to eat a lot of snacks.

✓ But nowadays, I am an adult, and I don't like to eat a lot of snacks.

The phrase 'this nowadays' is incorrect; 'nowadays' alone is sufficient. 'a adult' should be 'an adult' because 'adult' starts with a vowel sound. Also, adding 'and' improves sentence flow.