Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时语法和表达不够准确，句子结构较为混乱，建议简化句子，使用正确的时态和表达方式，并注意连贯性。

例: I usually eat snacks around 5:00 PM in the afternoon because I feel a little hungry but don't want to have dinner too early. So, I eat snacks to keep my stomach from feeling too empty.

提案: 表达不够清晰，语法错误较多，建议使用更准确的句型表达观点，并且注意逻辑连贯。

例: Actually, I know eating snacks is not very healthy, but I can't control myself because I find them delicious. Also, eating snacks helps me feel comfortable and relaxed, which reduces my stress.

提案: 回答内容较丰富，但句子结构和时态使用不当，建议简化句子并正确使用时态，使表达更自然流畅。

例: Yes, I ate snacks often when I was young. My parents usually bought snacks for me, and I often invited my classmates to my home for parties where we enjoyed many snacks.

提案: 表达不够自然，语法和用词有误，建议使用更地道的表达方式，并注意句子连贯和词汇准确。

例: I like chocolates because they taste delicious and give me energy to study or work. There are many different kinds of chocolates available in the market, and I enjoy them very much.

× Well I eat snack at 5:00 PM as afternoon because the time I'm a little hungry but I don't want to eat dinner so early time so I usually eat snack to make my stomach don't very hard.

✓ Well, I eat snacks at 5:00 PM in the afternoon because at that time I'm a little hungry but I don't want to eat dinner so early, so I usually eat snacks to make my stomach not feel very hard.

snack 应该用复数形式 snacks，因为这里指的是零食的总称或多次吃零食的习惯。

× Well I eat snack at 5:00 PM as afternoon because the time I'm a little hungry but I don't want to eat dinner so early time so I usually eat snack to make my stomach don't very hard.

✓ Well, I eat snacks at 5:00 PM in the afternoon because at that time I'm a little hungry but I don't want to eat dinner so early, so I usually eat snacks to make my stomach not feel very hard.

介词应使用 in the afternoon 而不是 as afternoon，表示时间段。

× Well I eat snack at 5:00 PM as afternoon because the time I'm a little hungry but I don't want to eat dinner so early time so I usually eat snack to make my stomach don't very hard.

✓ Well, I eat snacks at 5:00 PM in the afternoon because at that time I'm a little hungry but I don't want to eat dinner so early, so I usually eat snacks to make my stomach not feel very hard.

句中 'make my stomach don't very hard' 语法错误，应改为 'make my stomach not feel very hard'，动词搭配和否定形式错误。

× Uh, actually not I know but I can't control myself to eat it because I think snack is so delicious for me and I don't want eating comfortable and relaxed way for me to elevate my stress.

✓ Uh, actually I know it's not healthy but I can't control myself from eating it because I think snacks are so delicious for me and I want to eat in a comfortable and relaxed way to relieve my stress.

can't control myself to eat 应改为 can't control myself from eating，动词不定式用法错误；don't want eating 应改为 want to eat，动词形式错误。

× Uh, actually not I know but I can't control myself to eat it because I think snack is so delicious for me and I don't want eating comfortable and relaxed way for me to elevate my stress.

✓ Uh, actually I know it's not healthy but I can't control myself from eating it because I think snacks are so delicious for me and I want to eat in a comfortable and relaxed way to relieve my stress.

snack 应用复数 snacks，因为指的是零食的总称。

× Uh, actually not I know but I can't control myself to eat it because I think snack is so delicious for me and I don't want eating comfortable and relaxed way for me to elevate my stress.

✓ Uh, actually I know it's not healthy but I can't control myself from eating it because I think snacks are so delicious for me and I want to eat in a comfortable and relaxed way to relieve my stress.

elevate my stress 用词不当，应改为 relieve my stress，表达缓解压力的意思。

× Did you often eat snacks when you were young?

✓ Did you often eat snacks when you were young?

该句无语法错误，时态使用正确。

× Yes, of course. When I was a little girl I ate more often because my mother and father often bought something snack for me and I often invited my classmates to my home to have a party and we will have had more snacks.

✓ Yes, of course. When I was a little girl I ate more often because my mother and father often bought some snacks for me and I often invited my classmates to my home to have a party and we would have had more snacks.

something snack 应改为 some snacks，some 用于可数复数名词，且 snack 应用复数形式。

× Yes, of course. When I was a little girl I ate more often because my mother and father often bought something snack for me and I often invited my classmates to my home to have a party and we will have had more snacks.

✓ Yes, of course. When I was a little girl I ate more often because my mother and father often bought some snacks for me and I often invited my classmates to my home to have a party and we would have had more snacks.

we will have had more snacks 用于过去的情境不合适，应使用虚拟语气 would have had。

× Actually I like chocolates because I see chocolates are very delicious and it gave me the power to study or work and there are various different chocolate in the shop market.

✓ Actually, I like chocolate because I think chocolate is very delicious and it gives me the energy to study or work, and there are various kinds of chocolate in the market.

chocolates 一般指巧克力的种类或复数，但此处更合适用不可数名词 chocolate；various different chocolate 应改为 various kinds of chocolate。

× Actually I like chocolates because I see chocolates are very delicious and it gave me the power to study or work and there are various different chocolate in the shop market.

✓ Actually, I like chocolate because I think chocolate is very delicious and it gives me the energy to study or work, and there are various kinds of chocolate in the market.

see 应改为 think，表达观点；gave 应改为 gives，保持现在时态一致。