Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答中时态使用不准确，应该保持时态一致；句子结构较为混乱，表达不够自然。建议简化句子，使用正确的时态，并避免重复表达。

例: I usually eat snacks when I watch videos or feel a little hungry because a small amount of snacks can relieve my hunger without causing weight gain.

提案: 回答较为清晰，但连接词使用不够自然，且部分表达重复。建议使用更自然的连接词，并丰富句子结构。

例: It depends on the situation. If I eat only a small amount of snacks, I think it's fine; however, consuming too many high-calorie snacks can be unhealthy because it may lead to weight gain.

提案: 回答内容较好，但“sugars”用词不准确，建议使用更具体的词汇。连接词使用得当。

例: Yes, when I was a child, I often ate French fries and sweets before meals. However, my mother advised me not to eat too many snacks because they are unhealthy.

提案: 回答中“black chocolate”应为“dark chocolate”，且表达略显生硬。建议使用更准确的词汇，并使句子更流畅自然。

例: I prefer dark chocolate because it is not too sweet and has fewer calories. Moreover, I have heard that dark chocolate can help lower blood pressure, which is beneficial for our health.

× I usually eat snacks when I was watching videos or I'm just a little hungry because eating a little snacks could relieve my hunger and can't get weight.

✓ I usually eat snacks when I am watching videos or I'm just a little hungry because eating a few snacks can relieve my hunger and not gain weight.

句子中“when I was watching videos”时态不一致，前半句用一般现在时，后半句用过去进行时，应统一为一般现在时。此外，“a little snacks”中“snacks”是可数名词，前面应使用“a few”而非“a little”。“could relieve”改为“can relieve”更符合一般现在时表达习惯，“can't get weight”表达不准确，改为“not gain weight”。

× If I just eat a small amount of snacks I think it's no problem, but if I eat too much snacks, especially with high calories, I think it is unhealthy because it could gain weight.

✓ If I just eat a small amount of snacks, I think it's no problem, but if I eat too many snacks, especially those with high calories, I think it is unhealthy because it can cause weight gain.

“too much snacks”中“snacks”为可数名词，应使用“too many”。“could gain weight”表达不准确，改为“can cause weight gain”更符合语义。

× Sure, when I was a child, I often ate some French fries and sugars before the formal meals.

✓ Sure, when I was a child, I often ate some French fries and sugar before formal meals.

“sugars”通常不可数，表示糖的总称，应使用单数“sugar”。“the formal meals”中“formal meals”前不需要定冠词“the”。

× However, my mother told me not to eat too much snacks because it was unhealthy.

✓ However, my mother told me not to eat too many snacks because it was unhealthy.

“too much snacks”中“snacks”为可数名词，应使用“too many”。

× I prefer black chocolate because it is not too sweet and has low calories.

✓ I prefer dark chocolate because it is not too sweet and is low in calories.

“black chocolate”应为“dark chocolate”更常用且准确。“has low calories”表达不自然，改为“is low in calories”。

× Additionally, I heard that black chocolate can relieve the blood pressure, which is healthy to our body.

✓ Additionally, I heard that dark chocolate can lower blood pressure, which is healthy for our body.

“relieve the blood pressure”表达不准确，应为“lower blood pressure”。“black chocolate”改为“dark chocolate”。“healthy to our body”应为“healthy for our body”。