Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ должен быть более естественным и структурированным. Избегайте лишних слов и пауз, используйте связки для логичности. Например, можно сказать, когда именно и почему вы едите перекусы, с конкретными деталями.

例: I usually eat snacks in the evening before going to bed because it helps me relax and feel happy after a long day.

提案: Ответ неясен и содержит ошибки. Следует четко выразить мнение, использовать связки и конкретные примеры, избегать повторов и неясных фраз.

例: It depends on the type of snacks I eat; some are unhealthy, like chips and sweets, but others, like fruits and nuts, are good for my health.

提案: Ответ хороший, но можно улучшить связность и разнообразить лексику. Используйте связки для плавного перехода и более точные описания.

例: Yes, I often ate snacks as a child because my parents frequently bought me treats, which made me very happy.

提案: Ответ содержит повторения и нечеткие выражения. Следует использовать более точные слова и связки, а также конкретизировать причины предпочтения.

例: I prefer sweets over other snacks because they have a rich and delicious flavor that always lifts my mood.

× I eat snacks before I go bed and it gives me, uh, more positive emotions and brings me a joy.

✓ I eat snacks before I go to bed and it gives me, uh, more positive emotions and brings me joy.

The phrase 'go bed' is incorrect because the verb 'go' requires the preposition 'to' before a place. Also, 'a joy' is incorrect here because 'joy' is an uncountable noun and should not have an article 'a'. The correct phrase is 'go to bed' and 'brings me joy'.

× some of snacks that I consume, they are really harmful for my health and it depends so young.

✓ some of the snacks that I consume are really harmful to my health, and it depends on my age.

The phrase 'some of snacks' is missing the definite article 'the' before 'snacks'. Also, 'they are' is redundant after 'some of the snacks'. The phrase 'it depends so young' is unclear and likely intended to mean 'it depends on my age' or 'when I was young'. Additionally, 'harmful for' should be 'harmful to'.

× it brought me a lot of joy.

✓ it brought me a lot of joy.

This sentence is correct in past tense and needs no correction.

× I prefer sweets instead of other snacks because of it.

✓ I prefer sweets instead of other snacks because of their taste.

The phrase 'because of it' is vague and unclear. It should specify what 'it' refers to. Here, 'their taste' clarifies the reason for preference.

× It's rich and tasteful, tasty flavor.

✓ They have a rich and tasty flavor.

The original sentence is fragmented and uses 'tasteful' incorrectly. 'Tasteful' means having good taste in style, not flavor. The correct adjective for flavor is 'tasty'. Also, 'It's' is singular but refers to plural 'sweets', so 'They have' is correct.

× I eat sweets and it gives me positive emotions and great impact on me.

✓ I eat sweets and they give me positive emotions and have a great impact on me.

'Sweets' is plural, so the pronoun should be 'they' instead of 'it'. Also, 'great impact on me' needs the verb 'have' to be grammatically correct.