Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by avoiding redundancy and grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details using linking words. For example, mention the times you eat snacks and explain why you prefer those times.

例: I usually eat snacks twice a day, mostly in the late evening. This is because I often crave something sweet or salty at night, which helps me feel comfortable and satisfied before going to bed.

提案: Improve your answer by using correct grammar and clearer structure. Begin with a direct response, then explain with specific reasons or examples. Use linking words like 'however' or 'but' to connect ideas logically.

例: I think eating snacks can be unhealthy sometimes; however, I try to prepare healthy snacks regularly. But most of the time, I end up eating unhealthy snacks.

提案: Make your answer more coherent and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then provide specific examples with linking words. Avoid incomplete sentences.

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young. For example, I frequently had chips or biscuits after school because they were convenient and easy to eat.

提案: Try to structure your answer clearly with a topic sentence and supporting details. Use correct grammar and linking words like 'but' or 'sometimes' to connect ideas. Be specific about the healthy snacks you prepare.

例: Most of the time, I eat unhealthy snacks like chips or packaged foods. However, sometimes when I have free time and crave something healthy, I prepare snacks myself using fresh ingredients from my house.

× I usually eat snacks regularly, but on some days I eat.

✓ I usually eat snacks regularly, but on some days I don't eat.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. It seems the student intended to say that on some days they do not eat snacks. Adding 'don't' clarifies the meaning and corrects the sentence structure.

× Often I eat snack late night because I have a strong craving for something sweet or salty during that time.

✓ Often I eat snacks late at night because I have a strong craving for something sweet or salty during that time.

The word 'snack' should be plural 'snacks' to match the context of eating multiple items. Also, 'late night' should be 'late at night' to be grammatically correct.

× It helps me feel more comfortable and satisfied before going bed.

✓ It helps me feel more comfortable and satisfied before going to bed.

The phrase 'going bed' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'to' in 'going to bed'.

× Sometimes eating snacks are very unhealthy but sometimes I make very healthy snacks for my regular routine but it usually unhealthy most of the times.

✓ Sometimes eating snacks is very unhealthy, but sometimes I make very healthy snacks for my regular routine; however, it is usually unhealthy most of the time.

The subject 'eating snacks' is singular, so the verb should be 'is' not 'are'. Also, 'most of the times' should be 'most of the time' as 'time' is uncountable here.

× Yes, I used it snacks quite often when I was younger.

✓ Yes, I used to eat snacks quite often when I was younger.

The phrase 'used it snacks' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'used to eat snacks' to indicate habitual past action.

× For example, I would frequently have chips or biscuits after school because it is more convenient and easy way.

✓ For example, I would frequently have chips or biscuits after school because it is a more convenient and easy way.

The phrase 'easy way' needs an article 'a' before it to be grammatically correct.

× In that.

✓ (Sentence removed as it is incomplete and unclear.)

The phrase 'In that.' is incomplete and does not form a proper sentence. It should be removed or completed for clarity.

× Most of the times I eat unhealthy snacks like chips or packed foods but sometimes when I have a free time and a great craving for something healthy so I make a makeup snacks by my own by using healthy items in my house.

✓ Most of the time I eat unhealthy snacks like chips or packed foods, but sometimes when I have free time and a great craving for something healthy, I make my own snacks using healthy items in my house.

'Most of the times' should be 'Most of the time' as 'time' is uncountable here. 'A free time' should be 'free time' without article. 'Makeup snacks' is incorrect; it should be 'make my own snacks'. Also, 'by my own' should be 'on my own'. The sentence is corrected for clarity and grammar.