Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevabınızda kendinizi ifade ederken daha akıcı ve doğal cümleler kurmaya çalışmalısınız. Ayrıca, gereksiz tekrarları azaltarak cevabınızı daha etkili hale getirebilirsiniz. Örneğin, neden nadiren atıştırdığınızı açık ve net bir şekilde belirtin.

例: I usually avoid eating snacks because once I start, it's hard for me to stop. Therefore, I rarely eat them these days.

提案: Cevabınızda düşüncelerinizi daha açık ve mantıklı bir şekilde ifade etmelisiniz. Ayrıca, cümlelerinizi tamamlayarak ve gereksiz tekrarları kaldırarak daha anlaşılır olabilirsiniz.

例: I don't think snacks are healthy because they often contain many chemicals and preservatives to keep them fresh.

提案: Cevabınızda daha tutarlı ve akıcı cümleler kullanmalısınız. Ayrıca, neden eskiden daha çok atıştırdığınızı ve şimdi neden yemediğinizi daha net açıklayabilirsiniz.

例: Yes, I used to eat a lot of snacks when I was younger because I didn't know they were unhealthy. However, now I prefer to avoid them.

提案: Cevabınızda neden belirli atıştırmalıkları sevdiğinizi daha açık ve mantıklı bir şekilde ifade edin. Ayrıca, cümlelerinizi tamamlayarak ve tekrarları azaltarak daha doğal bir konuşma yapabilirsiniz.

例: I like eating chocolate and chips because they taste good, although I know they contain chemicals that can be addictive.

× I don't like to eat snacks because when I started to eat snacks, I cannot stop myself.

✓ I don't like to eat snacks because when I start to eat snacks, I cannot stop myself.

The sentence mixes past tense 'started' with present tense context. Since the statement is about a habitual action, present tense 'start' should be used instead of past tense 'started'.

× That's why I'm trying to not eat snacks.

✓ That's why I'm trying not to eat snacks.

The phrase 'trying to not eat' is awkward; the correct form is 'trying not to eat' because 'not' should come before the infinitive verb to express negation properly.

× That's a real that's why I eat almost never.

✓ That's the real reason why I almost never eat snacks.

The original sentence is fragmented and incorrectly structured. The correction clarifies the meaning and places the adverb 'almost never' correctly before the verb 'eat'.

× I don't, I don't think they are healthy because they contain a lot of a lot of chemicals in it because they had to, they had to save them because of they, they put them in a jam and they had to put them.

✓ I don't think they are healthy because they contain a lot of chemicals. They have to preserve them, so they put preservatives in them.

The original sentence is confusing and uses incorrect prepositions and phrasing. 'Contain a lot of chemicals in it' is redundant; 'contain a lot of chemicals' is correct. Also, 'because of they' is incorrect; it should be 'because they'. The sentence is rephrased for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yes, I used to eat snacks when I was younger because I didn't know they were.

✓ Yes, I used to eat snacks when I was younger because I didn't know they were unhealthy.

The sentence is incomplete; 'they were' needs an adjective to complete the meaning. Adding 'unhealthy' completes the thought and corrects the sentence.

× I like to eat chocolate and chips more because I guess they have some chemicals in it and they make us addicted to them.

✓ I like to eat chocolate and chips more because I guess they have some chemicals in them and they make us addicted to them.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrect when referring to plural nouns 'chocolate and chips'; it should be 'them' to agree in number.