Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác (ví dụ: 'snake' thay vì 'snack'). Bạn nên sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và đúng ngữ pháp, đồng thời tránh lặp lại ý không cần thiết. Hãy cố gắng sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: I usually eat snacks when I watch movies because it makes the experience more enjoyable. Sometimes, I also snack while playing games since it helps me relax.

提案: Bạn cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và từ vựng để câu trả lời rõ ràng hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy tránh lỗi phát âm và viết sai từ (ví dụ: 'next' thay vì 'snacks', 'Donna' không rõ nghĩa). Hãy trình bày ý kiến rõ ràng và giải thích cụ thể hơn.

例: I don't think snacks are very healthy because they often contain a lot of sugar and fat. However, eating snacks occasionally in moderation is acceptable and won't harm your health.

提案: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng sai (ví dụ: 'snake' thay vì 'snack', 'donkey snake' không đúng). Bạn nên sử dụng câu đơn giản, đúng ngữ pháp và giải thích rõ ràng hơn về thói quen ăn vặt khi còn nhỏ.

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was a child because I found them very tasty. However, my parents taught me to eat snacks in moderation since they are not very healthy. Sometimes, they still allowed me to have some as a treat.

提案: Bạn cần cải thiện cách diễn đạt và ngữ pháp để câu trả lời rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Hãy sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và tránh lỗi sai như 'his potato snack' hay 'steak too good'. Nên nói rõ sở thích hiện tại và quá khứ về đồ ăn vặt.

例: When I was young, I liked potato chips a lot. But now, I prefer healthier options like fruits or nuts because they are better for my health.

× I usually eat snake when I was watching movie because it's a perfect time to snack when you're watching movies or sometime I eat snake is playing games because I think it's very relaxed.

✓ I usually eat snacks when I am watching a movie because it's a perfect time to snack when you're watching movies or sometimes I eat snacks while playing games because I think it's very relaxing.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses incorrectly. 'I usually eat' is present tense, so 'when I was watching' should be 'when I am watching' to maintain tense consistency. Also, 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' and 'is playing' should be 'while playing' to correctly express the action. 'Snake' is a misspelling of 'snack'. 'Relaxed' should be 'relaxing' as it describes the feeling caused by the activity.

× I usually eat snake when I was watching movie because it's a perfect time to snack when you're watching movies or sometime I eat snake is playing games because I think it's very relaxed.

✓ I usually eat snacks when I am watching a movie because it's a perfect time to snack when you're watching movies or sometimes I eat snacks while playing games because I think it's very relaxing.

The word 'snake' is incorrect; it should be 'snack' and in plural form 'snacks' because it refers to multiple items. Also, 'movie' should be preceded by an article 'a' to be grammatically correct.

× I usually eat snake when I was watching movie because it's a perfect time to snack when you're watching movies or sometime I eat snake is playing games because I think it's very relaxed.

✓ I usually eat snacks when I am watching a movie because it's a perfect time to snack when you're watching movies or sometimes I eat snacks while playing games because I think it's very relaxing.

The phrase 'is playing games' is incorrect; it should be 'while playing games' to correctly indicate the simultaneous action. Also, 'when I was watching movie' should be 'when I am watching a movie' to match tense and article usage.

× I think it's not because next is not good for health, but sometimes a snack is OK. Donna make anything bad for your health.

✓ I think it's not healthy because snacks are not good for health, but sometimes a snack is OK. They don't make anything bad for your health.

'Next' is a misspelling of 'snack' and should be plural 'snacks' when referring generally. 'Donna' is incorrect; it should be 'They don't'. The sentence structure is awkward and needs correction for clarity and grammar.

× I think it's not because next is not good for health, but sometimes a snack is OK. Donna make anything bad for your health.

✓ I think it's not healthy because snacks are not good for health, but sometimes a snack is OK. They don't make anything bad for your health.

The word 'next' is incorrect and should be 'snacks' in plural form to refer to the general category. Also, 'a snack' is singular and correctly used when referring to an individual item.

× Donna make anything bad for your health.

✓ They don't make anything bad for your health.

'Donna' is incorrect and likely a mishearing or misspelling of 'They don't'. The pronoun 'They' is appropriate to refer to snacks in general.

× Yes, of course, but when I was young or when I was a child I very liked a snake because it's very delicious.

✓ Yes, of course, but when I was young or when I was a child I liked snacks very much because they were very delicious.

'I very liked' is incorrect; the adverb 'very' should come after the verb 'liked' or use 'liked very much'. 'A snake' should be 'snacks' plural. 'It's' should be 'they were' to match plural and past tense.

× Yes, of course, but when I was young or when I was a child I very liked a snake because it's very delicious.

✓ Yes, of course, but when I was young or when I was a child I liked snacks very much because they were very delicious.

'A snake' is incorrect; it should be 'snacks' plural to refer to multiple items. Also, 'it's' should be 'they were' to agree with plural 'snacks' and past tense.

× But my mom and my dad taught me donkey snake because it's not good for health.

✓ But my mom and my dad taught me not to eat snacks because they are not good for health.

'Donkey snake' is a mishearing or misspelling; the intended phrase is likely 'not to eat snacks'. Also, 'it's' should be 'they are' to agree with plural 'snacks'.

× But sometime they can give me some snack too.

✓ But sometimes they can give me some snacks too.

'Sometime' should be 'sometimes' to indicate frequency. 'Snack' should be plural 'snacks' when referring to some quantity.

× When I was young I would like his potato snack, but now I want to eat some steak too good for my health.

✓ When I was young I liked potato snacks, but now I want to eat some steak that is good for my health.

'Would like' is incorrect for past habitual action; 'liked' is appropriate. 'His' is incorrect and should be removed. 'Steak too good' is ungrammatical; it should be 'steak that is good'.

× When I was young I would like his potato snack, but now I want to eat some steak too good for my health.

✓ When I was young I liked potato snacks, but now I want to eat some steak that is good for my health.

'Some steak too good' is incorrect; 'some steak that is good' correctly uses a relative clause to describe the steak.

× So I choose the food or not snack because it's very good for my health.

✓ So I choose food, not snacks, because it's very good for my health.

'Or not snack' is incorrect; the correct contrast is 'not snacks'. The sentence is corrected to show clear contrast between 'food' and 'snacks'.