Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and concise. Use correct grammar and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence and then add supporting details using linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

例: I usually eat snacks in the evening because I feel a bit hungry after work or studies, so I need some energy before dinner.

提案: Make your answer clearer and grammatically correct. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. Avoid redundancy and be specific about health issues.

例: I don't think eating junk food snacks is healthy because overeating them can cause health problems. Therefore, I avoid eating snacks regularly.

提案: Use past tense consistently and improve sentence structure. Provide more specific details and use linking words to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because my mother mostly made them at home, so I developed a love for snacks.

提案: Be more specific about the snacks you like and use correct grammar. Use linking words to explain your preference clearly.

例: I like many snacks, but my favourite is Chinese food because it offers a wide variety and tastes excellent.

× I usually eat snack in the evening because I found it was the perfect time for eating snacks because in this time we have a little bit hungry from the work or studies, so we need some energy before the dinner at the time.

✓ I usually eat snacks in the evening because I found it was the perfect time for eating snacks as at this time we feel a little hungry from work or studies, so we need some energy before dinner.

The word 'snack' should be plural 'snacks' because it refers to general instances of eating small amounts of food. Also, 'a little bit hungry' is incorrect; it should be 'a little hungry' or 'a bit hungry'. 'The dinner' is incorrect; 'dinner' does not need a definite article here. The sentence structure is improved for clarity and correctness.

× No junk food or snacks not always good for us because do due to overeating of this we we caused by health issues. So that's why I don't eat snacks regularly.

✓ No, junk food or snacks are not always good for us because overeating them can cause health issues. So that's why I don't eat snacks regularly.

The sentence lacked the modal verb 'are' for the negative statement. 'Do due to' is incorrect; it should be 'because' or 'due to'. The phrase 'we we caused by health issues' is incorrect and unclear; it should be 'overeating them can cause health issues'. The correction clarifies the meaning and corrects modal verb usage.

× Yes, I often eat snacks when I was young because my mother made the mostly snacks at home so that's why I love snacks.

✓ Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because my mother mostly made snacks at home, so that's why I loved snacks.

The verb 'eat' should be in past tense 'ate' to match 'when I was young'. 'Mostly snacks' is incorrect; it should be 'mostly made snacks'. 'Love' should be 'loved' to maintain past tense consistency. The sentence is corrected for past tense usage and word order.

× I like so many snacks, but my most favorite snack is the Chinese food because it has a lot of variety and the taste was excellent.

✓ I like many snacks, but my most favorite snack is Chinese food because it has a lot of variety and the taste is excellent.

'So many snacks' is informal; 'many snacks' is more appropriate. 'The Chinese food' should be 'Chinese food' without 'the' as it refers to a general cuisine. 'Taste was excellent' should be 'taste is excellent' to maintain present tense consistency when expressing a general fact.