Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevabınızda dilbilgisi hataları ve anlamsal tutarsızlıklar var. "amuses me" ve "it's hilarious for me" ifadeleri doğal değil ve anlamı net değil. Ayrıca, cümleniz gereksiz tekrarlar içeriyor. Daha doğal ve anlamlı ifadeler kullanarak, neden hafta sonları atıştırdığınızı açıkça belirtmelisiniz.

例: I usually eat snacks on weekends because I have more free time then. Also, I often hang out with my friends, so we enjoy snacks together, which makes it more fun.

提案: Cümlenizde dilbilgisi ve anlam açısından sorunlar var. "Got Jelly beans" ve "it's amuses me" ifadeleri yanlış kullanılmış. Ayrıca, cümleleriniz birbirine bağlanmamış ve net değil. Sağlıksız atıştırmalıkları tercih ettiğinizi ve bunun nedenlerini daha açık ve tutarlı şekilde ifade etmelisiniz.

例: I don't think eating snacks is healthy because I usually choose unhealthy options like chips, chocolates, and jelly beans. However, I enjoy them because they make me feel happy, probably due to the dopamine release.

提案: Cevabınızda bazı dilbilgisi hataları ve eksik cümleler var. "I used to eat snacks all the time and." cümlesi tamamlanmamış. Ayrıca, sağlık durumunuzdan bahsederken daha açık ve düzgün cümleler kurmalısınız.

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young. In fact, I used to eat them very frequently. When I was 14, I was overweight and was diagnosed with diabetes.

提案: Cümlenizde anlam karışıklığı ve dilbilgisi hataları var. "dragon fruit with but flavor with Jelly Bean" ifadesi anlaşılması zor. Ayrıca, "it's amuses me" ifadesi yanlış. Daha açık ve doğal ifadeler kullanmalısınız.

例: I usually like to eat potato chips, jelly beans, chocolate, and sometimes dragon fruit. I enjoy these snacks because they taste good and make me happy.

× weekends always amuses me

✓ weekends always amuse me

The subject 'weekends' is plural, so the verb should be 'amuse' without the 's'. In English, third person singular verbs add 's', but plural subjects do not.

× I'm laughing to myself

✓ I laugh to myself

The verb 'laugh' is generally used without 'to' and in simple present tense here to express habitual action. Also, 'laugh to myself' is not idiomatic; 'laugh to myself' is acceptable but 'laughing to myself' is less common in this context.

× it's amuses me

✓ it amuses me

The auxiliary 'is' should not be used with the verb 'amuse' in this context. The correct form is 'it amuses me' without 'is'.

× That's my favorite snacks actually

✓ Those are my favorite snacks actually

'Snacks' is plural, so the demonstrative pronoun should be 'those' and the verb 'are' to agree in number.

× it's amuses me all the time

✓ it amuses me all the time

The auxiliary 'is' should not be used with the verb 'amuse' here. The correct form is 'it amuses me'.

× I have a diabetes too, at 14, yeah

✓ I had diabetes too, at 14, yeah

When referring to a past condition, the past tense 'had' should be used instead of 'have'. Also, 'diabetes' is uncountable and does not take an article 'a'.

× That's my favorite snacks actually

✓ Those are my favorite snacks actually

The demonstrative pronoun 'that' is singular, but 'snacks' is plural, so 'those' should be used instead of 'that'.

× dragon fruit with but flavor with Jelly Bean

✓ dragon fruit with a flavor of Jelly Bean

The phrase 'with but flavor with' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'with a flavor of' to indicate the flavor.

× it's amuses me

✓ it amuses me

The auxiliary 'is' should not be used with the verb 'amuse' here. The correct form is 'it amuses me'.