Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but try to avoid minor redundancy such as repeating similar ideas about convenience and cleanliness. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly, for example, 'because' and 'so'.

例: I usually eat snacks in the kitchen at home because it is more convenient and comfortable, and this also helps me keep the living room and bedroom clean, so I don't have to spend extra time tidying up later.

提案: Good use of contrast with 'however'. To improve, try to add more specific details or examples about how you limit snack intake or what kinds of snacks you avoid to make your answer richer.

例: I don't think eating snacks is very healthy because they often contain a lot of sugar, which can harm my health. However, I limit myself by eating snacks only occasionally, such as fruit or nuts, especially when I feel hungry between meals.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains some repetition and minor grammar mistakes ('I use I really enjoy', 'among among'). Try to avoid redundancy and check your sentence structure. Also, use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to connect ideas.

例: Definitely. When I was a child, I frequently ate snacks like chips and candy because I was unaware of their harmful effects. I really enjoyed the taste, so I often chose snacks over regular meals, which is common among kids at that age.

提案: Your answer is good but has a repeated word ('crispy, crispy'). Try to avoid repetition and use a wider range of vocabulary to describe the snacks. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: I really enjoy eating chips because they are crispy and flavorful. I especially like fried potatoes seasoned with spices, which makes them even tastier. Chips are my favorite snack, so I often eat them when I watch movies or hang out with my friends.

× I use I really enjoy the taste and often chose snacks over regular meals, which is common among among the kids at that age.

✓ I really enjoyed the taste and often chose snacks over regular meals, which was common among the kids at that age.

The sentence mixes present tense 'use' and past tense 'chose'. Since the context is about the past ('when I was young'), the verbs should be in past tense. Also, 'among among' is a repetition error. Correcting to past tense verbs and removing repetition improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.