Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答不够清晰，语法和表达存在较多错误，建议简化句子结构，直接回答问题，并用连词连接补充细节。

例: I usually don't eat snacks, especially in the evening, because I want to protect my teeth and stay healthy.

提案: 回答中有很多语法错误和词汇使用不当，建议用简单明了的句子表达观点，并具体说明原因。

例: No, I don't think eating snacks is healthy because it can cause tooth problems and make me feel uncomfortable.

提案: 回答中时态和语法错误较多，建议注意时态一致性，并用连词连接原因和结果。

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young, so now I have many tooth problems.

提案: 回答内容较丰富，但语法和表达不够准确，建议用连词连接句子，并注意词汇的正确使用。

例: I like to eat chocolate, spicy strips, and sugary snacks. I especially love chocolate, but eating too much when I was young caused dental problems.

× No, I wouldn't eat snacks usually, especially in evening because I think that it's next in evening but for my tooth and the snakes make me fit.

✓ No, I don't usually eat snacks, especially in the evening, because I think it's bad for my teeth and snacks don't make me feel good.

这里的“wouldn't eat”用法不当，表示习惯时应使用一般现在时的否定形式“don't eat”。另外，“in evening”缺少定冠词，应为“in the evening”。“tooth”应为复数“teeth”，因为指的是牙齿。最后，“snakes”应为“snacks”，拼写错误。建议使用正确的时态和词汇表达习惯行为。

× No, I don't think it's healthy for my for my health. I think it's bad for my toes and health. Eating too much snacks make my juice and funk or uncomfortable and make me feed so I think it's not hard.

✓ No, I don't think it's healthy for my health. I think it's bad for my teeth and health. Eating too many snacks makes me feel sick and uncomfortable, so I think it's not good.

“toes”应为“teeth”，意思是牙齿，单词错误。“too much snacks”应为“too many snacks”，因为“snacks”是可数名词。动词“make”应与主语“Eating too many snacks”保持单数一致，改为“makes”。“juice and funk or uncomfortable and make me feed”表达不清，推测为“feel sick and uncomfortable”。建议注意可数与不可数名词的区分，主谓一致，以及正确表达感受。

× Yes, I often eat snack when I was young. So now my tooth become very very brick and I have tooth problem so.

✓ Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young. So now my teeth have become very weak and I have tooth problems.

“eat”应使用过去时“ate”，因为描述过去的习惯。名词“snack”应为复数“snacks”。“tooth”应为复数“teeth”。“become very very brick”表达错误，应为“become very weak”。“tooth problem”应为复数“tooth problems”。建议注意时态一致，名词单复数，以及正确表达形容词。

× I like to eat chocolate, spicy strip and sugar especially. I very like to eat chocolate. When I was young, I eat too many chocolates. Because of that, I have many dental problems.

✓ I like to eat chocolate, spicy strips, and sugar especially. I really like to eat chocolate. When I was young, I ate too much chocolate. Because of that, I have many dental problems.

“spicy strip”应为复数“spicy strips”。“I very like”表达不正确，应为“I really like”。“eat”应使用过去时“ate”，因为描述过去的行为。“too many chocolates”应为“too much chocolate”，因为“chocolate”在此为不可数名词。建议注意名词单复数，副词使用，以及时态一致。