Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答中有语法错误和词汇使用错误，例如将"snacks"误说成"snakes"，影响了表达的清晰度。建议注意单词的正确拼写和发音，同时回答应更简洁自然，避免重复表达相同意思。

例: I usually eat snacks when I feel stressed because they help me relax and improve my mood.

提案: 回答中出现了词汇错误，如"celiacs"和"baggage"，应使用正确的词汇如"snacks"和"bag"。句子结构不够清晰，建议使用更准确的表达，并避免重复。

例: I think eating snacks is unhealthy for me because once I start, I tend to eat the whole bag, which is too much.

提案: 回答结构较好，但时态使用不够准确，最后一句应使用过去时。建议注意时态一致性，并适当使用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: I seldom ate snacks when I was young because my parents and teachers banned us from eating them at school and home. Therefore, I only ate snacks when I visited my grandma's house.

提案: 回答中表达重复且不完整，最后一句不完整。建议简洁表达喜好，避免重复，并补充具体细节使内容丰富。

例: I like chocolate snacks because they make me feel happy and help relieve stress. My favorite is milk chocolate because of its smooth and creamy taste.

× I usually eat snacks when I feel stress and I think snakes can release my stress and make me more happy and lift my moods.

✓ I usually eat snacks when I feel stressed and I think snacks can release my stress and make me happier and lift my mood.

这里'snakes'应为'snacks'，是复数名词，且'stress'前应加形容词形式'stressed'，'more happy'应改为'happier'，'moods'应为单数'mood'，因为指的是情绪状态。

× I think it's unhealthy for me to eat celiacs because once I have a bite I will eat whole baggage of the snacks.

✓ I think it's unhealthy for me to eat snacks because once I have a bite I will eat the whole bag of snacks.

'celiacs'是错误单词，应为'snacks'。'baggage'指行李，应改为'bag'。'whole baggage of the snacks'应改为'the whole bag of snacks'。

× So I only eat snacks when I go to my grandma's house.

✓ So I only ate snacks when I went to my grandma's house.

句子描述过去的习惯，动词应使用过去时态，'eat'改为'ate'，'go'改为'went'。

× I like snacks made of chocolate and I think it can make me feel happy and relieve my stress and I like the Milky flavor of chocolate.

✓ I like snacks made of chocolate and I think they can make me feel happy and relieve my stress and I like the milky flavor of chocolate.

'it'指代复数名词'snacks'，应改为'they'。'Milky'应小写为'milky'。

× I think it can make me more.

✓ I think it can make me happier.

句子不完整，缺少比较级形容词，'more'后应加形容词'happier'，使句子完整通顺。