Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在重复和语法错误，建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并使用正确的时态和表达方式。

例: I usually eat snacks when I'm watching TV or movies, or when I feel bored.

提案: 回答中出现了词汇错误（house应为health），建议注意词汇的准确使用，并且可以增加原因说明，使回答更完整。

例: I know eating snacks is not good for my health, but I feel happy when I eat them because they taste good.

提案: 回答中时态使用不当，建议使用一般过去时描述过去习惯，并且注意名词复数形式。

例: As I remember, I didn't eat many snacks when I was young because I didn't have enough money to buy them.

提案: 表达较为简单，建议使用更自然的表达方式，并且可以具体说明喜欢的巧克力零食种类。

例: I like to eat various chocolate snacks, such as chocolate bars and chocolate-covered nuts.

× I usually eat snacks when I when I when I'm watching TV, watching movie or when I when I'm boring.

✓ I usually eat snacks when I'm watching TV, watching movies, or when I'm bored.

这里的错误是动词形式使用不当。'watching movie' 应该用复数形式 'watching movies'，因为通常指看电影这个活动。'when I'm boring' 是错误的，应该用被动形式 'when I'm bored'，表示感到无聊。建议区分主动和被动的-ing形式，'boring' 是形容词，表示令人感到无聊的，'bored' 表示感到无聊的状态。

× I know it is not good for my house, however I feel happy when I eat snacks.

✓ I know it is not good for my health, however I feel happy when I eat snacks.

这里 'my house' 用错了，应该是 'my health'，因为吃零食对健康不好，而不是对房子不好。需要注意代词和名词的搭配，确保表达的意思正确。

× As I remember correctly, I didn't. I hadn't eaten so much snacks when I was young because I didn't have enough money to buy it.

✓ As I remember correctly, I didn't. I didn't eat so many snacks when I was young because I didn't have enough money to buy them.

这里时态使用错误。'I hadn't eaten' 应该用一般过去时 'I didn't eat'，因为描述过去的习惯。'so much snacks' 应该用复数 'so many snacks'，因为 'snacks' 是可数名词。'buy it' 应该用复数 'buy them'，因为指的是复数的零食。

× I like to eat some sorts of snacks made by chocolate.

✓ I like to eat some sorts of snacks made of chocolate.

这里 'made by chocolate' 用法错误，应该用 'made of chocolate'，表示零食是由巧克力制成的。'made by' 通常指制造者，而巧克力是材料，应使用 'made of'。