Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时应更自然流畅，避免语法错误和重复表达。可以简洁直接地说明吃零食的时间，并用连词连接原因，使表达更连贯。

例: I usually eat snacks in the afternoon when I feel stressed from studying. Eating snacks helps me relax and feel more comfortable during busy days.

提案: 回答应更简洁，避免语法错误，使用恰当的连接词使句子更连贯，同时提供具体例子说明不同零食的健康影响。

例: I think it depends on the type of snacks. For example, natural nuts are healthy, but processed snacks with many additives can be harmful to our health.

提案: 回答时应避免口头语“umm”，并注意主谓一致。可以更具体地描述喜欢尝试哪些零食，并用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because I was curious about different flavors. Trying various snacks helped me learn about new tastes and cultures.

提案: 回答应完整表达主语，避免语法错误。可以用连接词连接原因和结果，使表达更自然。

例: I really love eating sweet snacks like biscuits because they comfort me when I feel upset. Eating sweets helps me feel refreshed and improves my mood.

× And sometimes if you're really anxious about my academic study, so I may have some snack every day because it can brings me, it can bring me sense of comfort when I feel low spirited and depressed.

✓ And sometimes if I'm really anxious about my academic study, I may have some snacks every day because it can bring me a sense of comfort when I feel low spirited and depressed.

句中“if you're really anxious about my academic study”中，主语和谓语不一致，且时态不合适，应改为“if I'm really anxious about my academic study”。另外，“some snack”应为复数“some snacks”，因为“snack”是可数名词。动词“brings”应为“bring”，因为主语是“it”。

× And sometimes if you're really anxious about my academic study, so I may have some snack every day because it can brings me, it can bring me sense of comfort when I feel low spirited and depressed.

✓ And sometimes if I'm really anxious about my academic study, I may have some snacks every day because it can bring me a sense of comfort when I feel low spirited and depressed.

“some snack”中的“snack”是可数名词，表示不定数量时应使用复数形式“snacks”。

× I think actually it depends because some of the snacks are well pro processed and it may contain some natural elements that people like or people need while other kinds of snack may contain a lot of additives which are really harmful to people's body.

✓ I think actually it depends because some of the snacks are well processed and may contain some natural elements that people like or need, while other kinds of snacks may contain a lot of additives which are really harmful to people's bodies.

“pro processed”应为“processed”，去掉多余的“pro”。“other kinds of snack”中的“snack”应为复数“snacks”。“people's body”应为复数“people's bodies”，因为“people”是复数。

× I think actually it depends because some of the snacks are well pro processed and it may contain some natural elements that people like or people need while other kinds of snack may contain a lot of additives which are really harmful to people's body.

✓ I think actually it depends because some of the snacks are well processed and may contain some natural elements that people like or need, while other kinds of snacks may contain a lot of additives which are really harmful to people's bodies.

“other kinds of snack”中的“snack”应为复数“snacks”，因为“kinds”表示多种类，后面的名词应为复数。

× Yes, umm, because when I was a kid I had curiosity about the world around me.

✓ Yes, umm, because when I was a kid I was curious about the world around me.

“had curiosity”表达不自然，通常用形容词“curious”来表达“好奇的”状态，且时态应保持过去时。

× So different snacks represents different kinds of new things and I really want to expose myself to them.

✓ So different snacks represent different kinds of new things and I really want to expose myself to them.

主语“snacks”为复数，谓语动词应使用复数形式“represent”，而不是“represents”。

× Actually really love to eat sweet like biscuits because when I feel really upset or depressed, sweet food can bring me sense of comfort and it can make me refreshed again when I lose the heart in life.

✓ Actually, I really love to eat sweets like biscuits because when I feel really upset or depressed, sweet food can bring me a sense of comfort and it can make me feel refreshed again when I lose heart in life.

“sweet”应为复数“sweets”，表示甜食。缺少主语“I”。“bring me sense of comfort”中应加冠词“a”。“make me refreshed”应改为“make me feel refreshed”，因为“make”后接感官动词需用“feel”表达感受。

× Actually really love to eat sweet like biscuits because when I feel really upset or depressed, sweet food can bring me sense of comfort and it can make me refreshed again when I lose the heart in life.

✓ Actually, I really love to eat sweets like biscuits because when I feel really upset or depressed, sweet food can bring me a sense of comfort and it can make me feel refreshed again when I lose heart in life.

句子缺少主语“I”，导致句子结构不完整，应补充主语。