Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but needs improvement in natural phrasing and sentence structure. Try to use more natural expressions like 'in the evening' instead of 'in evening' and avoid redundancy such as 'sometimes' repeated. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I usually eat snacks in the evening or late afternoon. Sometimes, I have snacks while working. Most often, I eat fruits like bananas and apples. Occasionally, I enjoy crunchy snacks or biscuits.

提案: Your answer covers the idea but needs clearer sentence structure and more precise vocabulary. Avoid incomplete sentences and use linking words like 'however' to contrast ideas. Also, try to be more specific about the effects of unhealthy snacks.

例: It depends on the type of snacks I eat. Healthy snacks like nuts, fruits, and bananas are good for me. However, if I eat sugary snacks like ice cream or chocolates, it can raise my blood sugar levels, which is unhealthy.

提案: Your answer needs better grammar and clearer vocabulary. Use past tense consistently and avoid repetition. Also, clarify the names of snacks or explain them briefly for clarity. Use linking words to organize your answer.

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young. Specifically, I enjoyed Bengali snacks like pizza, China chew, and Bingo Swiss. These were my favorite treats during childhood.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many repetitions. Try to speak more fluently and organize your ideas clearly. Also, explain what 'Jays' means or avoid unclear terms. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: I have many favorite snacks, but currently I like to eat oats with bananas and milk. These snacks are healthy and keep me full for a long time.

× I usually eat snacks in evening or post afternoon.

✓ I usually eat snacks in the evening or in the afternoon.

The prepositions 'in evening' and 'post afternoon' are incorrect. The correct phrases are 'in the evening' and 'in the afternoon'. Also, 'post afternoon' is not a common expression in English.

× Sometimes I eat snacks in the meantime of my works and most often I used to eat enough bananas, fruits, apples.

✓ Sometimes I eat snacks while working, and most often I eat enough bananas, fruits, and apples.

The phrase 'in the meantime of my works' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'while working' or 'during my work'. Also, 'used to eat' implies past habit, but the context is present, so 'eat' is appropriate.

× Sometimes there's some crunchy things or biscuits.

✓ Sometimes there are some crunchy things or biscuits.

'Things' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is'. 'There's' is a contraction of 'there is', which is singular.

× Basically it depends that what kind of snacks I eat.

✓ Basically, it depends on what kind of snacks I eat.

The phrase 'depends that what' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'depends on what'. Also, a comma after 'Basically' improves clarity.

× When I eat the healthy snacks like nuts, fruits, bananas, it is obviously healthy for me.

✓ When I eat healthy snacks like nuts, fruits, and bananas, it is obviously healthy for me.

The article 'the' before 'healthy snacks' is unnecessary here. Also, adding 'and' before the last item in the list is standard in English.

× But when sometimes I eat some crunchy things, ice creams, chocolates or some sugar things, it will increase my sugar such levels and.

✓ But sometimes when I eat some crunchy things, ice cream, chocolates, or sugary things, it increases my sugar levels.

'Ice cream' is uncountable and should not be pluralized as 'ice creams'. 'Sugar such levels' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'sugar levels'. Also, 'it will increase' is better as 'it increases' to match the habitual action.

× Yeah, in my childhood or youngerhood, I eat, I eat snacks, basically.

✓ Yeah, in my childhood or younger years, I ate snacks, basically.

The past tense 'ate' should be used instead of 'eat' when referring to past actions. 'Youngerhood' is not a standard English word; 'younger years' or 'childhood' is better.

× Specifically, I eat Bengal snacks like pizza, China chew or some sort of bingo Swiss.

✓ Specifically, I ate Bengali snacks like pizza, Chinese chew, or some sort of Bingo Swiss.

'Bengal' should be 'Bengali' as an adjective. 'China chew' should be 'Chinese chew'. Also, past tense 'ate' is appropriate here.

× My favorite snacks lists are too long, but now but in in this time my in this time I I like to eat oats with bananas, Jays and milk.

✓ My list of favorite snacks is too long, but right now I like to eat oats with bananas, juice, and milk.

'Snacks lists' is incorrect; it should be 'list of favorite snacks'. 'Jays' is likely a mispronunciation or typo for 'juice'. Repetition and filler words are removed for clarity.