Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时应避免语法错误和重复表达，例如“parent and family”应改为“parents and family”。此外，句子结构可以更简洁自然，避免冗长。

例: I usually eat snacks during my leisure time, such as watching TV after work or camping with my family and friends on weekends.

提案: 回答中存在重复和语法错误，如“sneaking”应为“snacking”，“measure both in quantity and quantity”表达不清。建议用更准确的词汇和简洁句子表达观点。

例: I believe that eating snacks in moderation is fine. I always control the amount I eat to avoid any negative effects on my health.

提案: 回答较为自然，但最后一句表达有些矛盾，建议明确表达对零食的态度，并使用连词使句子更连贯。

例: Actually, I didn't eat snacks often when I was young because I preferred proper meals. Once I was full from a meal, I rarely craved snacks.

提案: 回答中使用了过多的语气词，影响流畅性。建议减少填充词，使用更自然的表达方式，并解释为什么喜欢这些零食。

例: If I had to choose, I would say plain potato chips and strawberry cake because they are my favorite snacks at home.

× These days I usually eat snacks in some leisure time, like watching TV after my work or camping with my friends and parent and family on the weekends.

✓ These days I usually eat snacks in some leisure time, like watching TV after my work or camping with my friends and parents and family on the weekends.

这里的“parent”应该用复数形式“parents”，因为通常指的是父母双方，且前面用了“friends”复数，保持一致。单复数错误会影响句子表达的准确性。

× When I when it comes to uh, sneaking, I always keep it reasonable and uh, measure uh, both in quantity and quantity, so it's never affect effects my health negatively.

✓ When it comes to snacking, I always keep it reasonable and measure both in quantity and quality, so it never affects my health negatively.

“sneaking”应为“snacking”，意思是吃零食；“measure both in quantity and quantity”应为“measure both in quantity and quality”，表达更准确；“it's never affect effects”应为“it never affects”，主语是单数，动词需用第三人称单数形式。这里涉及情态动词和动词形式的错误。

× I take my main courses seriously and once I am full from a meal I really crave snacks.

✓ I take my main courses seriously, and once I am full from a meal, I don't really crave snacks.

根据上下文，学生想表达吃饱后不渴望零食，原句表达与意思不符，需用否定形式。这里涉及现在时态的正确使用。