Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时语法和表达不够准确，句子结构混乱，且有重复和冗余。建议简化句子，直接回答问题，并用连词连接细节，使表达更自然流畅。

例: I usually don't eat snacks because I think they are unhealthy. Instead, I prefer eating vegetables and drinking water, which I believe are better choices for maintaining good health.

提案: 回答内容不够清晰，表达混乱且有语法错误。建议用简洁明了的句子说明原因，并使用连接词使逻辑更连贯。

例: I think snacks are unhealthy because they often contain a lot of oil and additives. Therefore, eating them is not good for my body, and it's hard to resist the temptation sometimes.

提案: 回答中时态使用不当，句子不完整且表达不清。建议使用正确时态，简洁回答并补充具体细节，使内容更丰富。

例: When I was young, I ate more snacks than I do now because I was curious about different kinds of snacks, especially those from other countries. My friends and I often bought souvenirs with snacks when we traveled abroad.

提案: 回答表达不清，语法错误较多，逻辑不连贯。建议直接说明喜欢的零食及原因，使用正确的词汇和句式。

例: I usually like to eat chocolate because it contains a lot of sugar and energy. Since I enjoy exercising, chocolate helps me replenish the energy I use during workouts.

× I think snack is so unhealthy so I usually prefer to eat more vegetables and more like water.

✓ I think snacks are so unhealthy so I usually prefer to eat more vegetables and drink more water.

snack是可数名词，表示零食，复数形式应为snacks；同时more like water表达不准确，应改为drink more water。

× So I think this is more better choice to make my hair body healthy.

✓ So I think this is a better choice to make my whole body healthy.

more better是双重比较错误，应只用better；hair body表达不清，应改为whole body表示整个身体。

× I think snack is unhealthy.

✓ I think snacks are unhealthy.

snack应使用复数形式snacks，谓语动词也应相应变为are。

× This is because snack is made for the machines.

✓ This is because snacks are made with machines.

made for the machines表达不准确，应为made with machines表示用机器制造。

× Most of the snacks are made for the oil and also like the adding uh uh, material.

✓ Most of the snacks are made with oil and also with added materials.

made for the oil应为made with oil；adding material应改为added materials。

× So I think those snack is not healthy for me to my BA body.

✓ So I think those snacks are not healthy for my body.

those snack应为those snacks，谓语动词is应改为are；my BA body表达不清，改为my body。

× When I was young, I usually eat more snack compared to now because when I am a child, I feel curious about anything including snacks.

✓ When I was young, I usually ate more snacks compared to now because when I was a child, I felt curious about everything including snacks.

描述过去习惯应使用过去时态ate和felt；snack应为复数snacks；anything改为everything更合适。

× So I would like to try anything snacks from other countries.

✓ So I would like to try any snacks from other countries.

anything snacks搭配不当，应改为any snacks。

× I have some friend we buy the souvenir that in, in oversea.

✓ I had some friends who bought souvenirs from overseas.

friend应为复数friends；时态应为过去时had和bought；souvenir应为复数souvenirs；in oversea应为from overseas。

× I usually eat chocolate just because it is concluding many sugars and also the heat.

✓ I usually eat chocolate just because it contains a lot of sugar and also energy.

concluding many sugars表达错误，应为contains a lot of sugar；heat用词不当，应为energy。

× So I am a person who would like to go to to do exercise.

✓ So I am a person who likes to do exercise.

go to to do exercise重复且不正确，应简化为likes to do exercise。

× So when I eating check it like I can baking like, uh, supplements, yeah.

✓ So when I eat chocolate, I can use it like supplements.

when I eating应为when I eat；check it like表达不清，改为eat chocolate；can baking应为can use it；句子结构需调整使其通顺。