Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự tự nhiên và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp như 'it depend' thay vì 'it depends'. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi với câu chủ đề rõ ràng và tránh sử dụng từ ngữ lặp lại hoặc không cần thiết như 'uh'.

例: I usually eat snacks during special occasions, such as holidays with my friends or family, or when celebrating a friend's birthday.

提案: Bạn nên sử dụng cấu trúc câu chính xác hơn và tránh sử dụng từ ngữ không tự nhiên như 'it's include'. Ngoài ra, hãy cung cấp thêm chi tiết cụ thể và sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: I think eating snacks is unhealthy for me because they often contain many chemical ingredients. Moreover, if I eat too many snacks, I might gain weight.

提案: Câu trả lời có lỗi ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu chưa rõ ràng, ví dụ như 'I usually eat snacks' nên là 'I usually ate snacks'. Bạn nên sử dụng thì quá khứ cho hành động trong quá khứ và làm rõ ý hơn.

例: When I was a kid, I usually ate snacks after a long day at school. My parents bought them for me as a reward. However, I no longer follow this routine because I know it's unhealthy.

提案: Bạn cần sử dụng thì quá khứ cho hành động trong quá khứ và thì hiện tại cho hiện tại. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời thiếu sự rõ ràng và có lỗi ngữ pháp như 'when I grown up' nên là 'when I grew up'. Hãy trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và cung cấp thêm chi tiết cụ thể.

例: When I was a child, I usually ate biscuits and fruit snacks because they made me feel happy and relaxed. However, now that I am grown up, I try to avoid these snacks to stay healthy.

× Well, it depend on occasion, like I'm going to a holiday with my friends or family or uh, celebrate, uh, my friend birthday.

✓ Well, it depends on the occasion, like when I'm going on a holiday with my friends or family or, uh, celebrating, uh, my friend's birthday.

The verb 'depend' should be 'depends' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. Also, 'occasion' needs the definite article 'the'. 'Going to a holiday' should be 'going on a holiday'. 'Celebrate' should be in the gerund form 'celebrating' to match the structure. 'My friend birthday' should be 'my friend's birthday' to show possession.

× Well, it depend on occasion, like I'm going to a holiday with my friends or family or uh, celebrate, uh, my friend birthday.

✓ Well, it depends on the occasion, like when I'm going on a holiday with my friends or family or, uh, celebrating, uh, my friend's birthday.

The preposition 'to' is incorrect with 'going' in this context; it should be 'going on a holiday'. Also, 'on the occasion' is the correct phrase.

× Well, I think it's unhealthy to me whenever I eat snacks because it's include a lot of chemical ingredients and if I eat too much I will be, uh, fat.

✓ Well, I think it's unhealthy for me whenever I eat snacks because it includes a lot of chemical ingredients, and if I eat too much, I will become, uh, fat.

The verb 'include' should be 'includes' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. Also, 'unhealthy to me' should be 'unhealthy for me'. 'Will be fat' is better expressed as 'will become fat' for clarity.

× Well I when I was a kid I usually eat snacks after a long day school.

✓ Well, when I was a kid, I usually ate snacks after a long day at school.

The verb 'eat' should be in the past tense 'ate' to match the past time frame. Also, 'a long day school' needs the preposition 'at' to be 'a long day at school'.

× Well I when I was a kid I usually eat snacks after a long day school.

✓ Well, when I was a kid, I usually ate snacks after a long day at school.

The preposition 'at' is required before 'school' to indicate location/time.

× My parents bought it to me as a reward.

✓ My parents bought them for me as a reward.

'It' is incorrect because 'snacks' is plural, so 'them' should be used. Also, the correct preposition is 'for me' instead of 'to me' when indicating the recipient of a purchase.

× But this routine they are no longer in the future because it's unhealthy for me.

✓ But this routine is no longer in the future because it's unhealthy for me.

The phrase 'they are' is incorrect here; 'this routine' is singular, so 'is' should be used. Also, 'no longer in the future' is awkward; better to say 'will no longer continue' or 'is no longer followed'.

× But this routine they are no longer in the future because it's unhealthy for me.

✓ But this routine will no longer continue because it's unhealthy for me.

To express that the routine will stop, 'will no longer continue' is appropriate future tense usage.

× Well, when I was a child I usually eat a biscuit and fruit snack which made me feel happy and relaxed.

✓ Well, when I was a child, I usually ate biscuits and fruit snacks which made me feel happy and relaxed.

The verb 'eat' should be in past tense 'ate' to match the past time frame. Also, 'a biscuit and fruit snack' should be plural 'biscuits and fruit snacks' to match typical usage.

× Well, when I was a child I usually eat a biscuit and fruit snack which made me feel happy and relaxed.

✓ Well, when I was a child, I usually ate biscuits and fruit snacks which made me feel happy and relaxed.

The pronoun 'which' correctly refers to the plural 'biscuits and fruit snacks'.

× But when I grown up, I don't follow this routine anymore because it's healthy for me.

✓ But when I grew up, I didn't follow this routine anymore because it's unhealthy for me.

'When I grown up' is incorrect; it should be 'when I grew up' (past tense). Also, 'don't follow' should be 'didn't follow' to match past time. 'It's healthy for me' contradicts the context; it should be 'it's unhealthy for me'.