Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够清晰，表达混乱，缺乏连贯性。建议回答时直接回应问题，使用简单明了的句子，并用连接词组织句子，使表达更自然流畅。

例: I usually eat snacks in the afternoon when I feel hungry or need a quick energy boost. Sometimes, I also eat snacks when I am outside with friends because it makes me feel happy.

提案: 表达不完整且语法错误较多，内容重复。建议用完整句子表达观点，明确说明零食的健康状况，并用具体理由支持观点。

例: I don't think snacks are very healthy because they usually lack important nutrients like proteins and vitamins that are found in rice or meat.

提案: 回答中有语法和词汇错误，表达不够准确。建议使用正确的时态和词汇，清楚描述过去的习惯，并用连接词使句子连贯。

例: When I was young, I was very keen on snacks. I often went out with my parents and persuaded them to buy biscuits for me because eating snacks made me happy.

提案: 表达较为清楚，但有词汇错误和重复。建议使用准确的词汇描述喜好，并用连接词丰富内容，使表达更自然。

例: When it comes to snacks, I definitely like chocolate, especially sweet chocolate rather than bitter. It makes me feel happier because of its sweet flavor.

× Oh, actually there is not a FaceTime.

✓ Oh, actually there is no FaceTime.

这里使用了否定结构，应该用 'there is no' 来表示不存在某物，而不是 'there is not'。'There is no' 是更自然和正确的表达方式。

× I want to eat something to go for, but sometimes.

✓ I want to eat something to go, but sometimes.

短语 'to go for' 是不正确的，正确表达是 'to go'，表示带走食物。

× When it comes to the health, I think it it is a healthy is not like the rice or meat.

✓ When it comes to health, I think it is not as healthy as rice or meat.

句中 'it it is a healthy is not like' 结构混乱，且 'the health' 应为 'health'，'not as healthy as' 用于比较健康程度。

× It doesn't have some nutrition ingredients.

✓ It doesn't have many nutritional ingredients.

'some' 用于肯定句，否定句中应使用 'many'，且 'nutrition ingredients' 应为 'nutritional ingredients'。

× When I was young, I'm keen.

✓ When I was young, I was keen.

时态错误，描述过去应使用过去时 'was'。

× I'm keen on a snacks.

✓ I'm keen on snacks.

'snacks' 是复数，前面不应加不定冠词 'a'。

× I usually go out to the show up with my parents and persuade them to buy bison for me.

✓ I usually go out to the shops with my parents and persuade them to buy biscuits for me.

'show up' 用法错误，应为 'shops' 表示商店，'bison' 应为 'biscuits'（饼干）。

× I think it can make me happier, so I I really like to eat it.

✓ I think it can make me happier, so I really like to eat it.

句中重复了 'I'，应删除多余的词。

× I like the sweet wall.

✓ I like the sweet one.

'wall' 是错误单词，应为 'one' 指代巧克力的甜味种类。

× It can make me happier and bring me some some sweet flavor.

✓ It can make me happier and bring me some sweet flavor.

'some' 重复出现，应删除多余的一个。