Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và tự nhiên hơn. Bạn nên tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'My mother and me' (phải là 'My mother and I') và sử dụng từ vựng chính xác hơn. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời hơi dài và có một số phần thừa, bạn nên tập trung vào trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và dùng liên từ để làm câu mạch lạc hơn.

例: I usually eat snacks at night during the weekend because I have free time then. My mother and I often go to the supermarket to buy snacks, which makes me happier and helps reduce stress.

提案: Bạn cần chú ý đến ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ, ví dụ 'a snack' nên là 'snacks' hoặc 'snack foods', 'it don't' nên là 'they don't'. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và tránh lặp từ. Cố gắng dùng từ vựng phù hợp và cụ thể hơn để thể hiện ý rõ ràng.

例: I think eating snacks is not very healthy because they are usually fast foods and don't provide many nutrients. However, I sometimes eat a small amount to reduce stress and feel very happy after a long day at school.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý thì động từ cho phù hợp với thời gian (ví dụ 'I often ate' thay vì 'I often eat' khi nói về quá khứ). Ngoài ra, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'It make me feel' nên là 'It made me feel'. Hãy sử dụng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và thêm chi tiết cụ thể để câu trả lời tự nhiên và mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because they were my favorite food. Whenever I got a high score at school, my father would give me a snack as a reward, which made me very happy.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi từ vựng và ngữ pháp, ví dụ 'potato teeth' có thể là 'potato chips', 'almost supermarkets' nên là 'almost all supermarkets'. Ngoài ra, câu cuối bị bỏ dở và không rõ nghĩa. Bạn nên hoàn chỉnh câu trả lời, sử dụng từ vựng chính xác và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp để câu trả lời tự nhiên và hiệu quả hơn.

例: I really enjoy eating snacks, especially potato chips because they are affordable and easy to find in almost all supermarkets. I also like chocolate because it tastes delicious and satisfies my sweet tooth.

× My mother and me always go to supermarket to buy numerous snacks for me, which is have me more happier and reduce the stress.

✓ My mother and I always go to the supermarket to buy numerous snacks for me, which makes me happier and reduces stress.

The pronoun 'me' is incorrectly used as the subject; it should be 'I'. Also, 'supermarket' needs the definite article 'the'. The verb phrase 'is have me more happier' is incorrect; it should be 'makes me happier'. 'Reduce the stress' should be 'reduces stress' to agree with the singular subject and to be more natural.

× I think it's not healthy for me to eat a snack because they're usually a fast food and it don't provide numerous nutrients.

✓ I think it's not healthy for me to eat snacks because they are usually fast food and they don't provide many nutrients.

'A snack' should be plural 'snacks' to match 'they're'. 'They're usually a fast food' is incorrect; 'fast food' is uncountable and should not have 'a'. 'It don't' is incorrect; 'they don't' agrees with plural 'snacks'. 'Numerous nutrients' is awkward; 'many nutrients' is more natural.

× However, sometimes I eat a small amount of snack.

✓ However, sometimes I eat a small amount of snacks.

'Snack' should be plural 'snacks' after 'a small amount of' because 'snacks' is countable plural here.

× It helps me reduce a stress and make me feel over the moon after a long day at school.

✓ It helps me reduce stress and makes me feel over the moon after a long day at school.

'A stress' is incorrect because 'stress' is uncountable and should not have an article. Also, 'make me feel' should be 'makes me feel' to agree with singular subject 'It'.

× Absolutely, I often eat snacks when I was young because it's my favorite food.

✓ Absolutely, I often ate snacks when I was young because they were my favorite food.

The past tense 'ate' should be used to match 'when I was young'. 'It's' should be 'they were' to agree with plural 'snacks' and past tense context.

× When I had a high score at school, my father always gave me a snack as a present.

✓ When I had a high score at school, my father always gave me a snack as a present.

This sentence is correct in past tense and needs no correction.

× It make me feel very happier.

✓ It makes me feel much happier.

'Make' should be 'makes' to agree with singular subject 'It'. 'Very happier' is incorrect; 'happier' is comparative and should be modified by 'much' or 'a lot' instead of 'very'.

× I love eating snacks very much, especially potato teeth because I think it's very affordable and easy to find in almost supermarkets.

✓ I love eating snacks very much, especially potato chips because I think they are very affordable and easy to find in almost all supermarkets.

'Potato teeth' is incorrect; the correct term is 'potato chips'. 'It's' should be 'they are' to agree with plural 'potato chips'. 'Almost supermarkets' should be 'almost all supermarkets'.

× However, I always try a chocolate because I think it's very.

✓ However, I always try chocolate because I think it's very good.

'Try a chocolate' is unnatural; 'try chocolate' is better. The sentence is incomplete; 'it's very' needs an adjective like 'good' to complete the thought.