Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi trước, sau đó mới bổ sung chi tiết. Ngoài ra, hãy chú ý sử dụng từ vựng chính xác (ví dụ: 'potato tea' nên là 'potato chips') và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời tự nhiên và logic hơn.

例: I usually eat snacks at night during the weekend because I have more free time then. My mother and I often go to the supermarket to buy snacks, especially potato chips, which are my favorite. Eating them makes me feel very happy.

提案: Bạn nên trả lời rõ ràng hơn về quan điểm của mình và sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh. Hãy tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và dùng từ vựng phù hợp như 'fast food' và 'healthy'. Sử dụng liên từ để kết nối ý và làm câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: I don't think eating snacks is very healthy because they are usually fast food and don't provide many benefits. However, eating a small amount sometimes can help me reduce stress.

提案: Bạn cần chú ý phát âm và chính tả (ví dụ: 'snake' nên là 'snack'). Câu trả lời nên ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và có cấu trúc tốt hơn. Sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc và tránh lặp từ.

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because they were my favorite food. After a long day at school, my mom and I would go to the supermarket to buy some snacks, which helped me relax.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên tập trung trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và tránh những câu không liên quan. Hãy sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời trôi chảy hơn.

例: My favorite snack is potato chips because they are affordable and help me reduce stress. Eating them makes me feel very happy, especially after a long day at school.

× I usually eat nights on the weekend because in the weekend I have a free time than my mother and me go to supermarket and buy a lot of snacks for me, especially potato tea because it's my favorite snack and I feel very over the moon.

✓ I usually eat snacks at night on the weekend because on the weekend I have more free time, so my mother and I go to the supermarket and buy a lot of snacks for me, especially potato chips because they're my favorite snack and I feel very over the moon.

The original sentence misuses 'nights' instead of 'snacks at night' and has awkward phrasing. 'Potato tea' is likely a mistake for 'potato chips'. Also, 'my mother and me' should be 'my mother and I' as the subject of the sentence. The modal verb 'can' or 'usually' is implied but not clearly expressed. The sentence is corrected for clarity and grammar.

× Definitely, I think it's not good for well-being because it's a fast food and it don't bring benefit for help.

✓ Definitely, I think it's not good for well-being because it's fast food and it doesn't bring benefits for health.

The modal verb 'do' is incorrectly conjugated as 'don't' for the singular subject 'it'. It should be 'doesn't'. Also, 'a fast food' is incorrect; 'fast food' is uncountable and does not need an article. 'Benefit for help' is awkward and corrected to 'benefits for health'.

× Absolutely, I often eat snake when I was young because it is my favorite food and I think when it's nice it helps me reduce the stress and make me feel over the mood after a long time at school when I have a free time my mom and me always go to supermarket.

✓ Absolutely, I often ate snacks when I was young because they were my favorite food and I think when they're nice they helped me reduce stress and made me feel over the moon after a long time at school. When I had free time, my mom and I always went to the supermarket.

The verb tense should be past tense to match 'when I was young'. 'Eat' changes to 'ate', 'is' to 'were', 'helps' to 'helped', 'make' to 'made', 'have' to 'had', and 'go' to 'went'. 'Snake' is a typo for 'snack'. 'My mom and me' should be 'my mom and I' as the subject. 'Over the mood' is corrected to 'over the moon'.

× Wow, my favorite snack I like to eat is potato chips because it's very affordable and make me reduce the stress.

✓ Wow, my favorite snack to eat is potato chips because they're very affordable and help me reduce stress.

'Potato chips' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' (contracted as 'they're') instead of 'it's'. Also, 'make me reduce the stress' is awkward; 'help me reduce stress' is more natural. The verb 'make' should be 'help' to fit the meaning.