Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时应避免语法错误，如“one times”应为“once”。回答应更简洁自然，避免重复表达。可以直接说明频率，并简要说明原因。

例: I usually eat snacks about once a week because my mom encourages me to eat healthily and avoid gaining weight.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清，如“makes people obesity”应为“cause obesity”。应使用更准确的词汇和句子结构，表达观点时要清晰。

例: I don't think eating snacks is healthy because they usually contain a lot of sugar and oil, which can cause obesity and increase the risk of heart disease.

提案: 回答中有语法时态错误，应使用过去时。避免使用口语填充词如“uh”。表达应更流畅自然。

例: I often ate snacks like chips, chocolates, and sweets when I was young because they helped me stay in a good mood and feel happier.

提案: 回答应避免语法错误，如“a vast number of taste”应为“a wide variety of flavors”。句子应更连贯，避免重复表达。

例: I like eating chips the most because there are many flavors, such as tomato and barbecue, which taste great and help improve my mood.

× Maybe about one times a week because I do not have snacks at home now and my mom was a very healthy person.

✓ Maybe about one time a week because I do not have snacks at home now and my mom was a very healthy person.

“one times”中“times”应为单数形式“time”，因为“one”表示单数。

× my mom was a very healthy person.

✓ my mom is a very healthy person.

这里描述的是现在的事实，应该用现在时态“is”，而不是过去时“was”。

× She often told me not to eat too many snacks because it was bad for my health and also it made me become fat.

✓ She often tells me not to eat too many snacks because it is bad for my health and also it makes me become fat.

描述习惯性动作时应使用一般现在时，“told”改为“tells”，“was”改为“is”，“made”改为“makes”。

× most of the snacks contains too much sugar and also oil that will often makes people obesity and some special containers that will also lead to some heart disease that was so scared.

✓ most of the snacks contain too much sugar and also oil that will often make people obese and some special containers that will also lead to some heart disease that is so scary.

“snacks”是复数，谓语动词应为“contain”而非“contains”；“makes”应为“make”与复数主语一致；“obesity”应为形容词“obese”；“was so scared”应为“is so scary”，形容疾病令人害怕。

× Did you often eat snacks when you were young? Guess I often eat snacks like chips, chocolates or sweets because eating these, uh, snacks can help me keep a good mood and often reminds me not to, uh, be unhappy in my daily life.

✓ Did you often eat snacks when you were young? I guess I often ate snacks like chips, chocolates or sweets because eating these, uh, snacks can help me keep a good mood and often reminds me not to, uh, be unhappy in my daily life.

回答过去习惯时，动词应使用过去时，“eat”改为“ate”。

× Well, I like getting chips best.

✓ Well, I like eating chips best.

“like”后面应接动词的-ing形式表示喜欢做某事，“getting”不合适，应改为“eating”。

× there are a vast number of taste of snack chips that people like in their daily life.

✓ there are a vast number of tastes of snack chips that people like in their daily life.

“taste”应为复数“tastes”，因为“a vast number of”后面接复数名词。

× That was my favorite.

✓ That is my favorite.

描述现在喜好时应使用现在时，“was”改为“is”。

× It provides me a really good taste and help me keep a good mood.

✓ It provides me a really good taste and helps me keep a good mood.

主语“It”是第三人称单数，谓语动词“help”应加-s，变为“helps”。