Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit long and contains some grammatical errors. Try to keep your response concise and clear, using correct verb forms and sentence structure. Also, avoid redundancy and ensure your sentences flow naturally.

例: I usually eat snacks in the evening while enjoying the sunset. It makes the experience more relaxing, and I like to have crackers or chips at that time.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and repetitive. Focus on giving a clear opinion with supporting reasons, and avoid repeating the same idea. Use linking words to connect your points logically.

例: I think eating snacks occasionally, like two or three times a week, is fine. However, eating fried or frozen snacks regularly can cause health problems because they are high in fat and preservatives.

提案: Your answer has several grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases. Try to use past tense consistently and express your ideas clearly. Avoid confusing or irrelevant details, and keep your answer focused.

例: Yes, I used to eat snacks every day when I was young because I didn't know they could be unhealthy. I often asked my parents to give me snacks because I really enjoyed them.

提案: Your answer is short and contains a grammatical error with 'even though' and 'but' used together. Try to give a more complete answer with specific examples and avoid unnecessary conjunctions.

例: There are many snacks to choose from, but I prefer chocolate chips and Lays crackers because they taste great and are easy to find.

× I usually prefer to eat snacks in the evening because I think it's the best time to eating snacks while watching sunshine views which gives me the joy and to have a better taste of the snacks and I prefer to eat. Crackers and chips.

✓ I usually prefer to eat snacks in the evening because I think it's the best time to eat snacks while watching sunshine views which gives me joy and allows me to have a better taste of the snacks. I prefer to eat crackers and chips.

The phrase 'to eating snacks' is incorrect because after 'to' (a preposition or part of an infinitive), the base form of the verb should be used, not the '-ing' form. Therefore, 'to eat' is correct. Also, the sentence was fragmented and needed restructuring for clarity and correctness.

× Yes it's healthy for eating snacks but not regularly like twice, thrice in a week.

✓ Yes, it's healthy to eat snacks but not regularly, like twice or thrice a week.

The phrase 'healthy for eating snacks' is awkward and incorrect. The correct modal verb usage is 'healthy to eat snacks'. Also, 'like twice, thrice in a week' should be 'like twice or thrice a week' for natural expression.

× It's healthy for eating snacks but if we eat them regularly it can be create some like problems in our health because some snacks are fried ones and frozen ones so it's not.

✓ It's healthy to eat snacks, but if we eat them regularly, it can create some problems in our health because some snacks are fried or frozen, so it's not healthy.

Again, 'healthy for eating snacks' should be 'healthy to eat snacks'. The phrase 'can be create' is incorrect; it should be 'can create'. Also, the sentence was incomplete and needed restructuring for clarity.

× When I was younger, I prefer to eat snacks daily because at that time I don't have that enough knowledge like it will be hazardous for my health.

✓ When I was younger, I preferred to eat snacks daily because at that time I didn't have enough knowledge that it would be hazardous for my health.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. Since the time frame is past ('When I was younger'), the verbs should be in past tense: 'preferred', 'didn't have', and 'would be'.

× So at that time I always becomes true warrant at front of my parents to give me snack on daily basis because I love to eat leaves.

✓ So at that time, I always acted as a true warrant in front of my parents to give me snacks daily because I loved to eat them.

The verb 'becomes' is incorrectly used in present tense; it should be past tense 'acted' to match the past time frame. The phrase 'true warrant' is unclear but kept as is; 'snack' should be plural 'snacks'. 'Love to eat leaves' seems incorrect or a typo; assuming 'them' refers to snacks.

× Even though there are a lot of snacks available in our world, but I prefer to eat chocolate chips, Lays crackers, et cetera.

✓ Even though there are a lot of snacks available in our world, I prefer to eat chocolate chips, Lays crackers, et cetera.

Using both 'Even though' and 'but' together is redundant and incorrect. One should use either 'Even though' or 'but' to connect clauses, not both.