Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如“about one hours”和“'cause I that time is my relaxing time”。建议你使用更准确的时间表达，并且避免口语缩写，保持语言正式和自然。

例: I usually eat snacks about an hour after dinner because that is my relaxing time. I like to have some cereals while lying on the sofa, enjoying my free time.

提案: 回答中语法和表达不够准确，例如“healthy for my mental”和“it may be 'cause some problem of obesity”。建议你用更准确的表达说明心理和身体健康的影响，并且使用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: Eating snacks is good for my mental health because it helps me relax. However, if I eat too many snacks frequently, it might cause obesity and affect my physical health.

提案: 回答中时态使用不准确，如“make me feel”和“when I eating them”。建议注意时态一致性，并且可以用连接词丰富句子结构，使表达更自然。

例: Yes, definitely. Eating snacks has been a habit since I was young. I often ate cookies, French fries, potato crepes, and delicious cakes, which always made me feel comfortable.

提案: 回答不完整且表达不清晰，例如“when I would go for”。建议你完整表达喜欢的零食种类，并且使用连词使句子更流畅。

例: I like to eat sweet snacks such as chocolate doughnuts, strawberry cakes, and cookies that I buy from the shopping mall when I go shopping.

× I often eat snacks after my dinner about one hours 'cause I that time is my relaxing time.

✓ I often eat snacks after my dinner for about one hour because that time is my relaxing time.

这里的'hours'应为单数形式'hour'，因为表示的是大约一小时的时间。'about one hours'是复数形式，数量与单数不匹配。建议记住表示具体数量时，1后面用单数，超过1用复数。

× I often eat snacks after my dinner about one hours 'cause I that time is my relaxing time.

✓ I often eat snacks after my dinner for about one hour because that time is my relaxing time.

'cause'是口语缩写，正式书面语应使用完整的'because'。此外，句中缺少介词'for'来表示时间段。建议在正式场合使用完整连词和正确介词。

× I often eat some snacks with some cereals and lying on the sofa like some couch potatoes.

✓ I often eat some snacks with some cereals while lying on the sofa like a couch potato.

这里'lying'前应加连词'while'表示同时发生的动作。'like some couch potatoes'中'some'不合适，且'couch potato'是固定表达，表示懒散的人，单数形式更合适。建议注意介词和连词的正确使用。

× It is healthy for my mental to eat snacks.

✓ It is healthy for my mental health to eat snacks.

'my mental'不完整，缺少名词'health'。'mental'是形容词，不能单独作名词使用。建议注意形容词和名词的搭配。

× I often feel very relaxing to eat some snacks.

✓ I often feel very relaxed when I eat some snacks.

'relaxing'是现在分词，表示使人放松的，形容事物；这里应使用形容词'relaxed'表示人的感受。建议区分形容词的不同形式及其含义。

× As for my body, I think it may be 'cause some problem of obesity when I eat more snacks frequently.

✓ As for my body, I think it may cause some problems of obesity when I eat snacks frequently.

'may be 'cause'用法错误，应为'may cause'表示可能导致。'problem'应为复数'problems'，且句子结构需调整。建议注意动词搭配和句子结构。

× This always make me feel comfortable when I eating them.

✓ This always made me feel comfortable when I ate them.

描述过去习惯时，谓语动词应使用过去时。'make'应为'made'，'eating'应为'eat'的过去式'eat'，但此处应用过去时态的动词'eat'的过去式'eat'，但更准确是用过去时态'ate'。建议注意时态一致性。

× Some kinds of sweet, for example the chocolate doughnut, strawberry cakes or some cookies which were bought from the shopping mall when I would go for.

✓ Some kinds of sweets, for example chocolate doughnuts, strawberry cakes, or some cookies which I bought from the shopping mall when I went there.

'sweet'应为复数'sweets'表示多种甜点。'the chocolate doughnut'应去掉定冠词'the'且复数。'which were bought'改为'which I bought'更自然。'when I would go for'结构不正确，应为'when I went there'。建议注意名词复数、冠词使用和时间状语从句表达。