Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to use plural form 'snacks' and say 'in the afternoon' instead of 'at afternoon'. Also, add a linking word to connect your ideas smoothly and avoid redundancy by combining sentences effectively.

例: I usually eat snacks in the afternoon because they help me to boost my energy for the rest of the day.

提案: Provide more specific examples of healthy snacks and use linking words to make your answer more coherent and detailed.

例: Yes, I think eating snacks can be healthy if you choose options like nuts or yogurt, which are both nutritious and tasty.

提案: Use a linking word to connect your sentences and be more specific about your experience to enrich your answer.

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was a student because the school provided packed snacks such as cookies and chocolate during breaks.

提案: Combine your ideas into one coherent sentence using linking words and be more specific about your preferences to improve clarity and flow.

例: I like eating cookies and chocolate, but sometimes I choose fruit because it is a healthier option.

× I eat snack at afternoon, it is a good way to fuel my energy up.

✓ I eat snacks in the afternoon; it is a good way to fuel my energy up.

The word 'snack' should be plural 'snacks' because it refers to a general habit of eating multiple or unspecified snacks. Also, the preposition 'at' is incorrect here; 'in the afternoon' is the correct phrase to indicate time of day.

× I eat snack at afternoon, it is a good way to fuel my energy up.

✓ I eat snacks in the afternoon; it is a good way to fuel my energy up.

The preposition 'at' is incorrectly used with 'afternoon'. The correct preposition to indicate a part of the day is 'in'. Therefore, 'in the afternoon' is correct.

× Yes, I think so. There are many healthy snacks which taste good.

✓ Yes, I think so. There are many healthy snacks that taste good.

While 'which' is not strictly incorrect, 'that' is more commonly used in defining relative clauses in American English. The plural 'snacks' is correct here.

× Yes I did when I was a student. School offered packed snacks like cookies, chocolate.

✓ Yes, I did when I was a student. The school offered packed snacks like cookies and chocolate.

A comma is needed after 'Yes' for correct punctuation. Also, 'School' should be preceded by the definite article 'The' because it refers to a specific school. Additionally, 'cookies, chocolate' should be connected with 'and' to list items properly.

× I like eating cookies. Chocolate, sometimes fruit is a good choice.

✓ I like eating cookies, chocolate, and sometimes fruit is a good choice.

The sentence is fragmented. Combining the items with commas and 'and' improves clarity. Also, 'fruit is a good choice' is correct because 'fruit' is uncountable here.