Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: حاول أن تستخدم جمل أكثر طبيعية وصحيحة نحويًا، ووضح فكرتك بشكل أفضل. على سبيل المثال، بدلاً من قول "It's helped me to run for the dinner" يمكنك قول "It helps me to feel less hungry before dinner".

例: I usually have snacks between 5:00 and 6:00 PM, after lunch. It helps me to feel less hungry before dinner.

提案: حاول تحسين تركيب الجمل واستخدام كلمات مناسبة للسياق. استخدم روابط بين الأفكار لتوضيح رأيك بشكل أفضل. مثلاً، بدلاً من "it's well for me" استخدم "it's healthy for me"، وبدلاً من "if it was" استخدم "if they are".

例: Yes, I think eating snacks can be healthy, but it depends on the type of snacks. If they are vegetables, fruits, or fresh juice, they are healthy. However, snacks like chips, candies, and chocolate from the supermarket are not healthy.

提案: حاول استخدام جمل أكثر وضوحًا وصحيحة نحويًا، وقلل التكرار. استخدم روابط لتسلسل الأفكار بشكل منطقي. مثلاً، بدلاً من "I did snacks" استخدم "I used to eat snacks".

例: Yes, I used to eat snacks when I was young. I loved them more than I do now because every kid likes snacks, especially those bought from the supermarket.

提案: حاول تحسين تركيب الجمل واستخدام كلمات مناسبة وواضحة. تجنب الأخطاء النحوية ووضح رأيك بشكل أفضل. مثلاً، بدلاً من "fresh use such homemade" استخدم "homemade fresh juice"، وبدلاً من "more well than" استخدم "healthier than".

例: I like to eat healthy snacks like vegetables, fruits, and even homemade fresh juice. These are better and healthier than the snacks bought from the supermarket.

× It's helped me to run for the dinner.

✓ It helps me to run for the dinner.

The sentence uses 'helped' which is the past participle form, but the context is present habitual action, so the present tense 'helps' is appropriate.

× I usually have snacks between 5:00 to 6:00 PM after my lunch.

✓ I usually have snacks between 5:00 and 6:00 PM after my lunch.

The preposition 'between' should be followed by 'and' when indicating a range, not 'to'.

× Yes, I do think it's well for me to eat snacks.

✓ Yes, I do think it's good for me to eat snacks.

The word 'well' is an adverb and does not correctly modify 'it'; 'good' is the correct adjective to describe 'it'.

× In my opinion it depends on what the snacks is.

✓ In my opinion it depends on what the snack is.

The subject 'snacks' is plural but the verb 'is' is singular; changing 'snacks' to singular 'snack' matches the singular verb 'is'.

× If it was vegetable, fruit, fresh juice, it's well snacks but it was from the supermarket.

✓ If it is vegetable, fruit, or fresh juice, it's good snacks, but if it is from the supermarket, like chips, candies, or chocolate, it's not good.

The sentence has incorrect conjunctions and verb tenses; 'if' clauses require consistent tense and proper conjunctions like 'or' to list items.

× Yes, I did snacks when I was young.

✓ Yes, I did eat snacks when I was young.

The verb 'did' requires a base verb after it; 'snacks' is a noun, so 'eat' should be used as the base verb.

× When I was young I I really loved snacks more than now because every kid loves snacks, especially when they bought from the supermarket.

✓ When I was young, I really loved snacks more than now because every kid loves snacks, especially when they are bought from the supermarket.

The pronoun 'they' refers to 'snacks' which is plural, so the verb should be 'are bought' to maintain subject-verb agreement and correct tense.

× I like to eat well snacks like vegetables, fruit and even fresh use such homemade.

✓ I like to eat good snacks like vegetables, fruit, and even fresh juice such as homemade.

'Well' is an adverb and incorrectly used; 'good' is the correct adjective. Also, 'use' is a typo for 'juice', and 'such homemade' should be 'such as homemade'.

× It's better than that snacks you bought from the supermarket and more well than.

✓ It's better than those snacks you bought from the supermarket and better than them.

'That snacks' is incorrect; 'those snacks' is correct for plural. 'More well' is incorrect; 'better' is the comparative adjective to use.