Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to use correct grammar and more precise vocabulary. Also, avoid redundancy and clarify what 'flitters' and 'McCain' refer to for better understanding. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I usually eat snacks during lunchtime because my mother prepares different kinds of snacks then. For example, sometimes she makes fritters, and other times she serves McCain frozen snacks.

提案: Avoid repetition and improve sentence structure. Be more specific about why snacks can be healthy or unhealthy. Use linking words to explain your opinion clearly.

例: Yes, I believe eating snacks can be healthy, especially when I avoid fried foods. For instance, choosing fruits or nuts as snacks is better for my health.

提案: Use past tense consistently and provide more details to support your answer. Use linking words to make your response coherent.

例: No, I did not often eat snacks when I was young because I thought they were unhealthy. Moreover, my parents encouraged me to eat balanced meals instead.

提案: Clarify the meaning of 'glitters' or correct it if it is a mistake. Use more precise vocabulary and avoid redundancy. Add linking words to connect your ideas.

例: I like to eat different kinds of snacks, such as fritters. Sometimes, I also buy chips from the market to enjoy as a treat.

× I usually eat snacks in the lunch time because my mother cook various types of snacks in that meal.

✓ I usually eat snacks at lunchtime because my mother cooks various types of snacks in that meal.

The verb 'cook' should be in the third person singular form 'cooks' to agree with the singular subject 'my mother'. Also, 'in the lunch time' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'at' and the noun is 'lunchtime' as one word.

× I usually eat snacks in the lunch time because my mother cook various types of snacks in that meal.

✓ I usually eat snacks at lunchtime because my mother cooks various types of snacks in that meal.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect with 'lunchtime'; the correct preposition is 'at'. Also, 'lunchtime' is one word.

× For example, sometimes she cooks flitters and sometimes McCain.

✓ For example, sometimes she cooks fritters and sometimes McCain.

The word 'flitters' seems to be a misspelling of 'fritters'. The verb 'cooks' is correctly used here for third person singular.

× Yes, I reckon that it is healthy for me to eat snacks. It is healthy for me when I when I do not eat fried meal.

✓ Yes, I reckon that it is healthy for me to eat snacks. It is healthy for me when I do not eat fried meals.

The phrase 'when I when I' is a repetition error and should be corrected to a single 'when I'. Also, 'fried meal' should be plural 'fried meals' to refer generally to such food.

× No, when I was young I did not eat snacks because it is not good for my health.

✓ No, when I was young I did not eat snacks because it was not good for my health.

The clause 'because it is not good' should be in past tense 'was not good' to match the past time frame 'when I was young'.

× I like to eat various types of snacks such as glitters and sometimes I go to the market and buy some chips for me.

✓ I like to eat various types of snacks such as fritters and sometimes I go to the market and buy some chips for myself.

The word 'glitters' is likely a misspelling of 'fritters'. Also, 'for me' is incorrect; the reflexive pronoun 'for myself' should be used when the object refers back to the subject.