Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but can be improved by making it more natural and grammatically correct. Avoid redundancy and be more specific about the times you eat snacks. For example, instead of saying "at in the evening or in the break time," you can say "in the evening or during breaks." Also, try to use linking words if you add more details.

例: I usually eat snacks in the evening after work or during my afternoon break at around 3 pm.

提案: Your answer is brief and lacks clarity. To improve, provide a clear opinion and explain why you think so using linking words. This will make your answer more coherent and informative.

例: I don't think eating snacks is very healthy because they often contain a lot of sugar and fat; however, sometimes having a small snack can be good to keep my energy up between meals.

提案: Your answer is detailed but has some grammatical errors and repetition. Use past tense consistently when talking about the past, avoid repeating words, and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, be concise and avoid redundancy.

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because they gave me a quick energy boost during school breaks. For example, I usually ate biscuits and fruits, which helped improve my mood after a long day of studying. Snacking was a comforting habit that made my childhood enjoyable.

提案: Your answer is understandable but can be improved by using more varied vocabulary and avoiding repetitive conjunctions like "or." Also, try to add a reason or preference to make your answer more complete.

例: I usually like to eat snacks such as chips, wafers, and different types of biscuits because they are tasty and easy to carry around.

× I prefer eating snacks regularly at in the evening or in the break time.

✓ I prefer eating snacks regularly in the evening or during break time.

The preposition 'at' is incorrectly used before 'in the evening'; only 'in the evening' is correct. Also, 'in the break time' should be 'during break time' to correctly express the time period. Use 'in' for parts of the day and 'during' for periods like breaks.

× Yes, I usually prefer eating snacks when I was young because they gave me a quick boost of energy during school breaks.

✓ Yes, I usually preferred eating snacks when I was young because they gave me a quick boost of energy during school breaks.

The sentence mixes present tense 'usually prefer' with past time 'when I was young'. To maintain tense consistency, 'usually preferred' (past tense) should be used to match the past time frame.

× For example, I often eat eat eat biscuits and fruits, which helps improve my mood after a long day of studying.

✓ For example, I often ate biscuits and fruits, which helped improve my mood after a long day of studying.

The sentence is about past habits ('when I was young'), so present tense 'eat' and 'helps' are incorrect. They should be changed to past tense 'ate' and 'helped' to maintain consistency with the past time frame.